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Untitled-1
Contributed by
UnleashedFuture
on
Thursday, 22nd May 2003 @ 05:05:00 PM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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You walk with eyes open in absolute
darkness,
A face resculpted by a lifetime of
bad choices,
Squandering youth and happiness for
that which kept you detached from reality,
Scars from being used as a commodity
go beyond the skin,
Even that reads like a map of the
past,
A place where there is no starting
point or destination,
This perpetual living suicide begins to
take on a malignancy,
Devoid of emotion those that surround are
shielded to it's effects,
While tenticles affix to those with
nothing more than love,
And are left to die in your wake from
just what your eyes can't see.
Copyright ©
UnleashedFuture
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2003-05-22 17:05:00]
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Re: Untitled-1
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by faffeee on
Thursday, 22nd May 2003 @ 07:30:49 PM AEST
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| this has amazing expressive language and imagery. you must be extremely attentive,emotive and open to have been able to feel this from a simple meeting of a friend's friends! well done, xxx |
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Re: Untitled-1
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by SimplyRead on
Tuesday, 27th May 2003 @ 04:22:03 PM AEST
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the meeting with the friend of a friend obviously affected you and you have the sensitivity to convey your feelings in writing - wonderful use of language and the subject is very thought provoking - well done xxxx
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Re: Untitled-1
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 27th June 2003 @ 08:35:12 AM AEST
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| Another piece of your writing that is excellent! Well done... smile & be proud ! |
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