|
 Menu
|
|
|
|
|
Social
|
|
|
|
|
Disregard
Contributed by
hauntedscorp
on
Saturday, 22nd November 2014 @ 10:13:15 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
|
Your type of love batters
A jarring roller coaster,
While more carnage scatters
Scarring, your lone survivor
Repulsed, the earth shatters
Convulsed by your pit of need
Deceptive voice patters,
Forcing absolute control
The wind protests in chatters-
Melodic eulogies
Leaving my heart in tatters;
Demonic apathy.
Copyright ©
hauntedscorp
... [
2014-11-22 22:13:15]
(Date/Time posted on
site)
Advertisments:
|
|
|
|
|
|
Sorry, comments are no longer allowed for anonymous, please register for a free membership to access this feature and more
|
|
All comments are owned by the poster. Your Poetry
Dot Com is not responsible for the content of any
comment.
That said, if you find an offensive comment, please
contact via the FeedBack Form with details, including poem title
etc.
|
|
|
Re: Disregard
(User Rating: 1 )
by ladyfawn on
Saturday, 22nd November 2014 @ 10:20:22 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
well, this is my mood tonight exactly, this is exquisite!
hugs n' love nessa |
|
|
Re: Disregard
(User Rating: 1 )
by deadreckoning1983 on
Saturday, 22nd November 2014 @ 11:32:50 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
Dat last stanza tho!!! Girl this is a great little poem. concise and biting.
....Demonic Apathy
What a line! |
|
|
Re: Disregard
(User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on
Saturday, 22nd November 2014 @ 11:47:02 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
See, now with that last line, I see a bunch of demons just sitting around, ho humming, yeah, yeah, "We gonna destroy the world today?" Another says, "Pfft, I don't care, whatev." The other says, "yeah, me too." So, hey we get to live another day and Angel & Buffy can rest this one out.
Seriously though. What's stupid? I'm thinking I no wanna have an angry Scorpenator after me. No way, un-uh. This bites and the rhyme scheme was pretty cool too.
I especially like:
Deceptive voice patters,
Forcing absolute control
It's like a more polite way of thinking you heya liar!!!! And then not losing it.
I love the bite of Scorperiffic poetry! |
|
|
Re: Disregard
(User Rating: 1 )
by sanders on
Sunday, 23rd November 2014 @ 12:03:48 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
Oh tell me Scorp...
How do you write in just a few words
A whole world of poetry
Such mastering over the pen
That can kill any demon like a sword ;) |
|
|
Re: Disregard
(User Rating: 1 )
by unknown_utopia on
Sunday, 23rd November 2014 @ 09:37:51 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
convulsed by your pit of need....
hmm that line grabs me
and spins me,
Excellent..... |
|
|
|
· 
Poetry
Community
Members
Areas
Reference
Search
Top
Others
