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Cautionary Tale
Contributed by
hauntedscorp
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Tuesday, 3rd February 2015 @ 09:27:41 AM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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A cautionary tale
Token white whale,
Epic fail.
Insert clich here-
A hostage of fear,
Victim of the mirror,
Condition severe.
The end is near-
A sacrificial lamb
Creature of the damned,
Equivalent of spam.
Bursting with nothingness-
A martyr who's blameless,
Hopelessly aimless,
Unpainted canvas.
An animated carcass.
Copyright ©
hauntedscorp
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2015-02-03 09:27:41]
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Re: Cautionary Tale
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by deadheadpoet on
Tuesday, 3rd February 2015 @ 12:00:50 PM AEST
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| Wow. The way you wrote this...with such a sharpness. So to the point and core of things. Very moving piece, Scorp. |
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Re: Cautionary Tale
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by kmec1990 on
Tuesday, 3rd February 2015 @ 12:32:32 PM AEST
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What she said! Wow! Suits my mood today.awesome write
K
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Re: Cautionary Tale
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 4th February 2015 @ 04:04:16 AM AEST
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| The abruptness of the lines and the sharpness of the rhyme give this quite a bite. I've read it numerous times, and it actually makes me feel down. I guess the power and quality of the poem induce such feelings. Take the author's note, and do what you once, in good faith, advised me to do: 'cut yourself some slack.' x |
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Re: Cautionary Tale
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 4th February 2015 @ 07:53:19 PM AEST
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"An animated carcass." Is that the political correct way of saying Zombie?
I read this a few times now and I just kept coming away with this sad feeling.
Definitely love yourself and don't beat yourself up. Writing poetry, however, is good therapy. Keep up the Scorpitude! |
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Re: Cautionary Tale
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by ming on
Friday, 6th February 2015 @ 11:11:53 PM AEST
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I normally don't like rhymes, just a thing peculiar to me, not you. But I must say this made me feel. As good poetry should.
ming |
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Re: Cautionary Tale
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by ladyfawn on
Monday, 16th February 2015 @ 09:57:01 AM AEST
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beautifully penned, i've read it several times with each
reading bringing new images,
hugs n' love nessa |
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Re: Cautionary Tale
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by JamesStockdale on
Sunday, 1st January 2017 @ 08:19:12 AM AEST
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Very crisp poem. Like ladyfawn I too can read something new into it and that is the beauty of it. It/'/s an open poem and it lets you decide the meaning of it.
Bravo!
James |
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