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Hope
Contributed by
jay_dos
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Saturday, 14th February 2015 @ 09:27:37 AM in AEST
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I'M quiet but passionate
sometimes I feel
like being born was an accident
I'm just telling you the truth
so you don't have to ask for it,
I'm just a demon that was sent
I'm the past
I'm never letting go of it
no not one bit.
I have trust Issues
that's the main reason why I can't trust you
and after everything I been through
I can't trust no one...
I feel like I've been hypnotized to do well
but still
I'm going through hell,
everybody makes mistakes but you failed to allow it
you never listen to me
so who do you think you getting loud with.
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jay_dos
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2015-02-14 09:27:37]
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Re: Hope
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 15th February 2015 @ 10:38:13 PM AEST
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This is a poem that I'm sure a lot of us can relate to. Pretty good.
I think it would have flowed better if you checked your spelling and change this line I can't trust no one to I can trust no one or I can't trust anyone, but hey, it's your poetry and you should write it the way you want. Just observations &/or suggestions.
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Re: Hope
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by ladyfawn on
Tuesday, 17th February 2015 @ 11:37:55 PM AEST
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raw, beautifully heartfelt,
hugs n' love nessa |
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Re: Hope
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by unknown_utopia on
Friday, 20th February 2015 @ 11:23:29 PM AEST
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welcome to ydpc
keep writing,
well done....... |
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