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Broken
Contributed by
Natkingcole
on
Thursday, 27th August 2015 @ 02:43:07 PM in AEST
Topic:
LovePoetry
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If you like, I could fumble with my pen,
breath deep and try to etch my heart on
this slip of paper.
If you like, you could peer over my shoulder,
peek through your veil and study the careful
markings left wet.
If you like, I could sit for days, hunched
like a wounded creature and cease sleep
to make your fondness eager.
If you like, you could put on your satin,
make a bow of you hair and come dancing
with me in the blue light.
If you like, I could come out from this cave,
let the sun light melt my shadow and burn
my thin image onto your shallow eyes.
If you like, we could sit in fear, create lies
to appease and succor and remain together
apart; broken, broken, broken.
Copyright ©
Natkingcole
... [
2015-08-27 14:43:07]
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Re: Broken
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by Archie on
Thursday, 27th August 2015 @ 03:13:42 PM AEST
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| I like this poem for all the choices it gives. I can relate to each one |
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Re: Broken
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 27th August 2015 @ 04:55:26 PM AEST
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| Very very very well written. The imagery depicts the title perfectly. I really like this one |
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Re: Broken
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by JamesStockdale on
Saturday, 29th August 2015 @ 09:54:38 AM AEST
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Great poem
It catches many emotions and it's unexpected in its ending.
James |
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Re: Broken
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by CandyAnn on
Monday, 31st August 2015 @ 05:40:07 PM AEST
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Nice work
It really leaves the reader thinking with many images in mind. |
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Re: Broken
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by FireStarter on
Friday, 5th August 2016 @ 01:28:58 AM AEST
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| The choices that you put made it sad, but overall it was a really good poem :) |
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