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Dawning
Contributed by
Archie
on
Sunday, 30th August 2015 @ 05:57:46 PM in AEST
Topic:
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Dancing, playing, sighing, raging
hiding, gauging, briving, craving
clawing, learning, buying, facing
dawning, 'during, rising, changing
sixteen words abroad in cleft
hidden meaning holding breath
jestering alone we cry
contemplating alibis
dueling swords now urging on
tongues twisting in the morn
abreast like geese we all fly south
crosswise rows of life we plow
Pathways turned unto their sides
up side down our world resides
lightbulbs light ideas create
meanings form we contemplate
sixteen words I write here now
like puzzles to a hidden vow
how we long to understand
only doing comprehends
Copyright ©
Archie
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2015-08-30 17:57:46]
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Re: Dawning
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by The_Unknown on
Monday, 31st August 2015 @ 04:29:13 AM AEST
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I find a humor on the interior of this poem that I particularly enjoy.
It seems serious yet light hearted.
Well played, friend.
T_u |
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Re: Dawning
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by JamesStockdale on
Monday, 31st August 2015 @ 06:53:54 AM AEST
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This was great!
What a spin of words.
The flow and reading was easy.
Very Kool write indeed!
James |
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Re: Dawning
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 1st September 2015 @ 01:17:16 AM AEST
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There is definitely something hidden here...or is there?
Smooth, flowing, enjoyable. Me likes.
Thanks,
Tim |
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Re: Dawning
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by SuicidalSon on
Tuesday, 1st September 2015 @ 03:46:25 PM AEST
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| I don't comprehend the doings of this poem. I'm sorry but I can't get the rythym. Like a deaf guy playing the drums. |
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Re: Dawning
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by softerware on
Tuesday, 1st September 2015 @ 07:49:23 PM AEST
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"abreast like geese we all fly south;
crosswise rows of life we plow!"
We are not as different as we want to be, and the only way to know is to do.
Enlightem me, I cannot find "briving" in the dictionary?
softerware
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Re: Dawning
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by ladyfawn on
Monday, 7th September 2015 @ 04:55:57 PM AEST
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beautiful clever write:)
hugs n' love nessa |
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