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I'm A Simple Moth
Contributed by
Invierno
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Monday, 21st March 2016 @ 08:35:41 AM in AEST
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I/'/m a simple moth at a wall, at a loss, why flame en flames me so
though I/'/ve watched my brothers burn, bright-eyed
to moment last, brightest as they passed.
I/'/ve yet to discern why I seek to skate on flaming ice,
to chance the crack and tongued leap
while my wings yet pump for life.
Still beating down the need to feel and to know-
why for me, a simple moth,
flame en flames me so.
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Re: I'm A Simple Moth
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by ming on
Monday, 21st March 2016 @ 10:39:56 PM AEST
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Fav line, I/'/ve yet to discern why I seek to skate on flaming ice, to chance the crack & tongued leap while my wings yet pump for life/'/ PERFECT!
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Re: I'm A Simple Moth
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by irisblue on
Monday, 21st March 2016 @ 11:36:01 PM AEST
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| it/'/s my lucky night, several poems from you! I can relate to this, again left somewhat speechless, Love this. |
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Re: I'm A Simple Moth
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by xHeathenx on
Wednesday, 23rd March 2016 @ 06:06:33 AM AEST
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| Hey there Mike. I/'/ve got to say I like this one, especially with the introductory and ending stanzas both carrying a sighing observation, but the second/middle stanza... I/'/m a bit lost with the "to chance the crack and tongued leap" It/'/s not clicking. Could you explain? |
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Re: I'm A Simple Moth
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by xHeathenx on
Wednesday, 23rd March 2016 @ 06:13:47 AM AEST
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Ah okay. I see, after looking into it and thinking a bit, I/'/ve come to understand it. Nice job with the usage of tongue there. lol
Perhaps the moth in this particular instance needs to feel that there/'/s a flame nearby, and is tempted to bring it closer, for the closer it is, the more imposing it is. Without the flame, neither is there an extravagant end to match the extravagant life, for a mutual celebration so to speak, nor is there a reason to be thankful or grateful for what one has(instinctively) to an extent.
Just a thought. I/'/m probably way off, but hey.
(Something tells me Kierkegaard would have extensive thoughts into this, as I/'/m sure Camus does.) |
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Re: I'm A Simple Moth
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by RussellReinhardt on
Thursday, 9th June 2016 @ 12:41:01 PM AEST
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Hello my brother
Mike this is a stunning piece. Again I/'/m reading betwix the lines as I always love to do. If I may. This is not just a simple moth to me. Its a lesson in life. Look before you leap, if you saw your mate splat against the ground then don/'/t you leap as well. Beautiful lesson Boet. God bless
Greetings
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