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endless in the end
Contributed by
ming
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Saturday, 26th March 2016 @ 12:25:11 PM in AEST
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I opened
my empty mouth
no proud words
only greater
emptiness
and a purchased
dream flung far
with an ease
we can/'/t conceive
once a void
has meaning
I will end to end
as the start did start
inside a cry
riding the feedback
of shine and dark.
Copyright ©
ming
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2016-03-26 12:25:11]
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Re: endless in the end
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by softerware on
Saturday, 26th March 2016 @ 12:50:38 PM AEST
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Life and death, shine and dark and a purchased dream! Two sides of the same ribbon. I love the analogy here, and my favorite line is "I will end to end as the start did start inside a cry".
You made me realize that we cry when we are born; and we cry when we die! What odd creatures we are!
Most thoughtful is your mind/'/s eye!
softerware
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Re: endless in the end
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by xHeathenx on
Sunday, 27th March 2016 @ 06:48:30 AM AEST
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I have to say, the first half is spectacular!
The image is dark, almost gloomy, but at the same time, illustrative.
The second half, got me stumped a bit, but with a little bit more imagination I made some sense of it. :)
The very end though... Wow. With lack of better words, the picturing of beginning itself... it/'/s like staring into the eye on someone, and only seeing the color, but behind a solar eclipse. It/'/s an incredible sight. :)
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Re: endless in the end
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by Invierno on
Wednesday, 30th March 2016 @ 03:14:38 AM AEST
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Magnificent.
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