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a piece of paper
Contributed by
ming
on
Tuesday, 26th April 2016 @ 09:09:29 PM in AEST
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when no one/'/s watching
who I am
burned to ash
crumbled as trash
inked here
I am
as a gift to you
wrote from heart-blood
as an intent/invocation
not your cup of tea
got you covered
two points
slam-dunk
remember this,
garbage in
garbage out
back-bite; verb
attacked with words
spin
spun it
done it
my way.
Copyright ©
ming
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2016-04-26 21:09:29]
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Re: a piece of paper
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by Beyfoxman5 on
Tuesday, 26th April 2016 @ 09:15:58 PM AEST
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Life to the coolest medium ever. Creative write.
Best,
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Re: a piece of paper
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 26th April 2016 @ 11:27:15 PM AEST
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| You keep doing it your way, buddy, it/'/s so good. But, the clearest way to the universe is down past the forest, and through a grain of sand. |
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Re: a piece of paper
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by poeticjestix on
Wednesday, 27th April 2016 @ 05:10:13 AM AEST
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not sure how ash is crumbled to trash. if it is for the rhyme alone then i/'/d drop it if I was you- which i/'/m not.
Also, same problem with verb and word |
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Re: a piece of paper
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by Invierno on
Wednesday, 27th April 2016 @ 08:45:38 AM AEST
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Hi Ming.
Very cool piece. I see a comment that is of a critical nature. this person has done similar on mine....if this person expands their mind a bit it wouldn/'/t hurt them at all.
You are superb.
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Re: a piece of paper
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by JamesStockdale on
Wednesday, 27th April 2016 @ 09:30:11 AM AEST
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Out of the box.
Great layout and flow.
Me likes it!!!!!
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Re: a piece of paper
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by duff on
Thursday, 28th April 2016 @ 02:16:58 PM AEST
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Out of the box and bizarre in the best way possible. You never fail to stir the mush. Well done my friend
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Re: a piece of paper
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by Puppy_dog_eyes on
Friday, 29th April 2016 @ 07:05:02 PM AEST
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A unique quality here that slaps you in the face and forces you to take note.
That/'/s the effect it had on me anyway.
You certainly have an interesting mind
Steve |
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Re: a piece of paper
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by irisblue on
Saturday, 30th April 2016 @ 05:06:00 PM AEST
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| Wow, you are a brilliant poet. I really love this and could relate. |
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