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Man On The Run
Contributed by
duff
on
Thursday, 28th April 2016 @ 10:24:58 PM in AEST
Topic:
oops
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How do I get out of this place
The mirror said I/'/ve changed
Again here I am running away
Old television at lonely hotel
The fuzz talked as night fell
Knuckles busted just like me
Spent cigarettes repent knee
Bloody hands sink and tears
Breaking news heartbeat fear
Never wanted to kill that man
No matter he don/'/t understand
Come get me light up my ways
Mama all I wanted was to play
Forgive me now I/'/m on the run
Forever always a smiling son
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duff
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2016-04-28 22:24:58]
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Re: Man On The Run
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by JamesStockdale on
Friday, 29th April 2016 @ 01:52:27 PM AEST
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This reads like a Bonnie and Clyde movie.
Brilliant poem! Enjoyed it.
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Re: Man On The Run
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by Puppy_dog_eyes on
Friday, 29th April 2016 @ 06:59:19 PM AEST
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It did have a bit of a desperado feel about it, so I think you achieved what you set out to.
Some strong imagery kept the gritty edge
Nice write
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Re: Man On The Run
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by ming on
Friday, 29th April 2016 @ 07:45:48 PM AEST
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Nice. Scary kind of.
ming |
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Re: Man On The Run
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by northernlights on
Tuesday, 3rd May 2016 @ 01:24:20 AM AEST
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| There are some writers that I cannot wait to read my friend and feel excited to see and hear again. " Knuckles busted just like me," great line, gritty piece of reality, exciting writing and well worth waiting for. |
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Re: Man On The Run
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by hauntedscorp on
Sunday, 11th December 2016 @ 06:52:35 PM AEST
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Like coming out of an alcoholic/'/s blackout. Trying to piece together the missing memories...Or worse; as it seems in your poem, being able to piece your night together.
Shock. Horror. Man on the run.
//Forever always a smiling son//
Perfect little closer to keep the chill in the air! ^_^
~Scorp
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