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Barkeep
Contributed by
ramfire
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Saturday, 14th May 2016 @ 01:40:05 PM in AEST
Topic:
FriendshipPoetry
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Make mine a double scotch my man,
and tell me, your names really Dan?
You ask, where did I get this tan?
Not in Yorkshire, barkeep.
But taken in Afghanistan.
Now, dont you go and weep
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2016-05-14 13:40:05]
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Re: Barkeep
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 14th May 2016 @ 07:13:21 PM AEST
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| Always wanted to say: /'/Make mine a scotch on the rocks, Mac. Set /'/em up . Joe. Give me one for ma baby, and one more for the road./'/ But, that is from civvy street, not where bullets fly. x |
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Re: Barkeep
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 14th May 2016 @ 08:04:26 PM AEST
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I really like this conversational style...
I also like how one might not perceive
the angle or exactly what it means ( i confess, i do not)
you put it under the category of friendship, and it made me think of someone I used to help via phone who was from Egypt and said he was an ex fighter pilot
He was an old man and I was helping him with his diabetes test kit and he thanked me by sending me a medal he used to wear on his uniform.
we are all about some place, perhaps where we come from, or where our people, or culture comes from, or perhaps a place we visited once that stays with us forever.
so i truly enjoyed how you style this as a bar scene
or conversational piece.
then, there/'/s...
"Now, don/'/t you go and weep."
this mixed with the style of the poem that
already contained clever prose, stuck.
kind of like hemingway would write it
standing up I kind of think.
Peace!
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Re: Barkeep
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by JamesStockdale on
Friday, 11th September 2020 @ 01:58:33 PM AEST
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| You remind me of Rakerman on here. |
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