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Fade to the Mirror
Contributed by
puppy_dog_eyes
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Friday, 24th June 2016 @ 06:04:34 PM in AEST
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Theres a fade to the mirror today, a heavy dulled shine
As I look deeper through my reflection back to recent times
When your energy shone bright, always my beacon
Lighting the pathway as Ive journeyed through life
Emotion soaks the weary bones, oppresses with solemnity
Goodbye stings the tired mind, bleaches out the positive
Time the healer mocks, slow ticks each waking hour
Shadows cast by sombre days do not lift in Summer smile
My future will bow to the echoes of your past
Though parted, still unified in snapshot memories
Mind photographs prevail when the physical is lost
That is now your legacy, the way you touched our hearts
Tears will fall in the coming days, when we give your soul to rest
But the threads of your existence are never to decay
And those that know you best of all, though shocked and mourning now
In time will celebrate the gift you gave, by being in their lives.
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Re: Fade to the Mirror
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by xHeathenx on
Saturday, 25th June 2016 @ 11:09:12 AM AEST
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There/'/s a bit of appreciable nature to this content that makes it impressive, especially as a visual piece. It reminds of a hero or protagonist looking into the mirror for a dramatic scene, be it reflection, or the angry punching the mirror scene we often see as well.
But I just have to say, I can/'/t find the flow, because my mom/'/s listening to the radio in the same room, quite likely lol, which is a little embarrassing to say the least. I don/'/t know if that/'/s because of that or not, but it doesn/'/t feel to me in reading it, that you/'/re embodying the idea or the state of mind. That/'/s not an insult or offense by any means, especially because given my recent state of mind, I/'/ve been less than poetic lately.
//(This is my first comment in about 3 months, and the first poem that I/'/ve been able to read without losing interest since then)//
The reason why this caught my attention is because I/'/ll tend to look a the front page for something to read, briefly and go about my day; but this poem/'/s description reminded me of something else I/'/ve written of a similar notion, but am holding onto until I/'/m feeling poetic again.
I/'/m not sure if this is a helpful comment or not, but I can definitely say this, my favorite things are these: "heavy dulled shine" because it sounds like an oxymoron, which I always appreciate a clever use of, and the line
"Shadows cast by somber days do not lift a summer smile"
That is a fantastic line, one I could not do any better myself if I had tried.
All the best(Steve right?),
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Re: Fade to the Mirror
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by irisblue on
Saturday, 25th June 2016 @ 10:39:30 PM AEST
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Steve,
this poem really touched my heart. You capture beauty and emotions eloquently, love this and I thought of my father as I read this
Kara |
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Re: Fade to the Mirror
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by Spike on
Tuesday, 28th June 2016 @ 07:48:06 AM AEST
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Just beautiful; a lovely tribute and well balanced with candour, grief and hope.
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Re: Fade to the Mirror
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by unknown_utopia on
Tuesday, 12th July 2016 @ 02:39:22 PM AEST
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| beautiful flowing tribute..... |
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