|
 Menu
|
|
|
|
|
Social
|
|
|
|
|
Nevermore
Contributed by
hauntedscorp
on
Saturday, 12th November 2016 @ 09:03:01 PM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
|
Uncharacteristically dour,
I decide to take a hot shower
Stirred awake by something while dreaming
Foggy; much like the mirror steaming
Onto the mat my feet are stepping
Faintly I hear a sudden schlepping
Masked somewhat by the faucet leaking
Cannot deny there came a creaking
Over pounding heart, quiet rapping
Outside the bathroom door, rap-tapping
My stomach contents begin to sour,
Evil reigns in the bewitching hour
With quickened breath and tears a streaming
The door opens and something/'/s gleaming
Gnashing yellow teeth to my horror
Soulless eyes that shook me to my core
It stepped inside, skillfully trapping
Its raspy breath like thunder clapping
Speaking slowly, perhaps with sorrow,
Demanding of my soul to borrow
Licking its lips, and with face beaming,
My voice lost, but silently screaming
A cackle, then its wings a flapping,
Turned, and began eagerly lapping
Frightened to move, I simply cower-
From this supernatural power
Slowly sinking to the cold, damp floor
I awoke on this Earth, nevermore.
Copyright ©
hauntedscorp
... [
2016-11-12 21:03:01]
(Date/Time posted on
site)
Advertisments:
|
|
|
|
|
|
Sorry, comments are no longer allowed for anonymous, please register for a free membership to access this feature and more
|
|
All comments are owned by the poster. Your Poetry
Dot Com is not responsible for the content of any
comment.
That said, if you find an offensive comment, please
contact via the FeedBack Form with details, including poem title
etc.
|
|
|
Re: Nevermore
(User Rating: 1 )
by JamesStockdale on
Sunday, 13th November 2016 @ 09:30:40 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
This was a great write indeed.
Had an awesome flow too. You had me riveted to my seat. I thought you were going to pull a fast one in the end and say it was your dog licking your face.
James |
|
|
Re: Nevermore
(User Rating: 1 )
by duff on
Sunday, 13th November 2016 @ 02:04:09 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
| Twists and turns woven through out creative writing. Dark writing that invokes excitement. Moves the heart into unknown spaces. Always a pleasure and fun to read. |
|
|
Re: Nevermore
(User Rating: 1 )
by ingeniusidiot on
Monday, 14th November 2016 @ 12:38:22 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
Amazing write. Has an awesome flow and i have to agree that it keeps you in your seat. And if you know Poe/'/s Raven then you can use its rhythm and suits it perfectly. Keep up the great work
Rich |
|
|
Re: Nevermore
(User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 15th November 2016 @ 10:54:00 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
God, dreary and scary. This sort of reminded me of the Buffy where her mom had lost her marbles and this being was there to eat her brains or sumthin.
Very graphic imagery. Absolutely loved this!
|
|
|
Re: Nevermore
(User Rating: 1 )
by softerware on
Friday, 2nd December 2016 @ 09:36:55 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
Poe would be proud! This yanks the reader out of sensibility and takes them along right in your bare wet feet! I was expecting a heroic rescue finale, but no, our hero just succumbs. That signature of helplessness brought back the bathtub scene from Pyscho..was a perfect fate for your theme, summed in the powerful last two lines. Quote us all:
Wewantmore!
softerware |
|
|
|
· 
Poetry
Community
Members
Areas
Reference
Search
Top
Others
