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Repeat Offender
Contributed by
hauntedscorp
on
Friday, 25th November 2016 @ 06:54:03 PM in AEST
Topic:
oops
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Stifled groans
Interspersed with
Twilight bullets
Muffled tones
Deftly muted
Marauding bandits
Chaos jones
Gravelly friction
Whimpered moans.
Copyright ©
hauntedscorp
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2016-11-25 18:54:03]
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Re: Repeat Offender
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by unknown_utopia on
Saturday, 26th November 2016 @ 07:12:33 AM AEST
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I so love the way it flowed,
I could visual the scene in my mind.
lights,camera action!!! |
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Re: Repeat Offender
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by softerware on
Saturday, 26th November 2016 @ 04:14:21 PM AEST
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The mind wanders, from desert to Wild West, Bullets to moans, and can/'/t seem to put a finger on the scene...but can we ever feel the pulse of it! Like a kettle drum it pounds along, evolving to a crescendo and fading to a whimper. I am exhausted from the thundering carousel of still images you have flashed at us like a silent movie!
I suspect that this is truly how the mind functions--and who knows how we manage to make sense of it? A toast to staccato emotional rhythms dancing across the page! You have painted feelings!
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Re: Repeat Offender
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by duff on
Sunday, 27th November 2016 @ 09:37:13 AM AEST
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This has such a violent and sinister tone to it that it smacks you in the face leaving you to ponder what just happened. This is great. It keeps you off balance which is unpredictable and fun.
Awesome write my friend
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Re: Repeat Offender
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by JamesStockdale on
Sunday, 27th November 2016 @ 07:33:51 PM AEST
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I read so many things into this I/'/m not so sure that I even really know which is which. That in itself made it exciting and unusual.
Great write.
James |
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Re: Repeat Offender
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 30th November 2016 @ 02:59:02 PM AEST
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I`m not even sure I should type the feeling this gave me. But I can certainly say, // POWERFUL//!!!!!
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