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Primitive Killing
Contributed by
unknown_utopia
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Saturday, 26th November 2016 @ 09:03:12 AM in AEST
Topic:
insomniac
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Been up all night
trying to get the words right
self reflection on my infection
has me forgetting how to rhyme,
from dusk to dawn
unseen forces coming on strong
wat happened to my friend
you are invisible when I am falling.
I am on a white knuckle ride
on the highway to hell
trying to understand
why do I feel better
when I am angry with me.
Trapped under ice
because I refuse to be assimilated
there will be no raising the dead
when you drown in madman waters.
Toxic pestilence sway
for the infected and insane
it is a primitive killing...
full metal jacket is on
still the verbal war wounds me
sludge kicker never realized
that some things are better left unsaid.
I am buried alive
and still I try to write,
I search for the meaning of why......
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2016-11-26 09:03:12]
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Re: Primitive Killing
(User Rating: 1 )
by hauntedscorp on
Saturday, 26th November 2016 @ 11:29:16 AM AEST
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Thank you for sharing something so relatable.
/'/Drowning in madman waters/'/ - well put!
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Re: Primitive Killing
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by ingeniusidiot on
Monday, 28th November 2016 @ 06:22:06 AM AEST
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We all have been there, my friend. Another piece that is easy to relate to. You dont add any fillers or dress it up with frills. You tell it how it is and Thats All Folks.
Another Great Piece!
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Re: Primitive Killing
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by duff on
Monday, 28th November 2016 @ 04:18:19 PM AEST
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You have captured the chaotic highway beautifully. Caught in limbo. Rest walks away leaving us to find our way to somewhere else. Never knowing where that street takes us. Great imagery and well written.
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