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I SAW THE MAN ON THE HILL SPINNING ROUNDS
Contributed by
alicewhite
on
Thursday, 22nd December 2016 @ 10:59:45 PM in AEST
Topic:
Grief
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I saw the man on the hill
Spinning round
I saw the man by the board
Spinning round
Spinning sound
Spinning unspun spins to now
Swan lake
Sad song
Playing kingball
In a school
People sitting upon rocks
Stone thrones
One for the princess
Red rose letter her
Come home
Bushel bushel bushel n wheat
Playing dinosaurs I see a fallen tree
And a man a white van and animal print
He talks of wild flowers
He names them all
Pain on the back of my head
She said
Face down I am left at the edge
Of the trees
Blue wild flowers surround me
Untill someone found me
You know I saw it
You know I saw you too
Red haired boy on the bridge
You fell into the centre of the sun
Rainbow bridge connection
Spinning spins yet to be spun
Copyright ©
alicewhite
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2016-12-22 22:59:45]
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Re: I SAW THE MAN ON THE HILL SPINNING ROUNDS
(User Rating: 1 )
by duff on
Wednesday, 28th December 2016 @ 05:55:20 PM AEST
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Best way I can describe this is gripping. It really does. Reading it you can feel an innocence woven with imagery that suddenly explodes in color. I like how you wrote this.
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Re: I SAW THE MAN ON THE HILL SPINNING ROUNDS
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by ming on
Thursday, 29th December 2016 @ 06:54:48 PM AEST
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This has a wicked charm to it of unease. But we know not why & that/'/s cool.
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Re: I SAW THE MAN ON THE HILL SPINNING ROUNDS
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by hauntedscorp on
Saturday, 31st December 2016 @ 10:57:35 AM AEST
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The title itself is disconcerting, but the poem as a whole is unsettling and intriguing to the extreme.
I am wildly in love with that first stanza. I love when words dance around in my mouth, and the playfulness belies the intensity of this write.
Fantastic writing, Alice! I see you have a new muse, and he fits just right. 😉
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Re: I SAW THE MAN ON THE HILL SPINNING ROUNDS
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 22nd January 2017 @ 03:00:35 AM AEST
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