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Something To Forget Me By
Contributed by
hauntedscorp
on
Sunday, 1st January 2017 @ 08:35:50 PM in AEST
Topic:
insomniac
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At the crepuscular stage
Of improvised sleep
An unseen force awakens
Agitated whence repose castrated
Plagued by vitality/'/s horned sickness-
Replete with thorned isolation
Enslaved by ol/'/ Sandman/'/s rage
Internalized spite
Bolstered alert unshaken
Palpitated burst of crescendos dredge
Reverberate a hollowed shrillness
Cloistered, barren, deprivation
Deftly built inertial gauge
Quantified worthless
Fruits of labour forsaken
Fluctuated by time/'/s cruel two-pronged stake
Slicing through fogged thickness
Spastic, walleyed, infiltration
Recompense for garnished wage
Pulverized daggers
Strike currency mistaken.
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Re: Something To Forget Me By
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by ming on
Sunday, 1st January 2017 @ 10:09:36 PM AEST
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You spy on me! Really though, great job. I know these feels. /'/At the crepuscular stage
Of improvised sleep/'/ Sets the tone, the opening line! And this, /'/Replete with thorned isolation
Enslaved by ol//'// Sandman//'//s rage
Internalized spite/'/ Spikes it deep inside my smudged weary eyes. Good show.
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Re: Something To Forget Me By
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by JamesStockdale on
Monday, 2nd January 2017 @ 10:22:53 AM AEST
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I had one of those nights as well last night.
Crazy play on words. I enjoyed it!
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Re: Something To Forget Me By
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by duff on
Monday, 2nd January 2017 @ 05:18:14 PM AEST
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A well executed piece of writing that checks the boxes. Intelligence reaching depth in challenges. The title is great also! I read it more than once and each time it was better. Awesome job Scorp
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Re: Something To Forget Me By
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 2nd January 2017 @ 10:56:57 PM AEST
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Sleep Marauding, insomnia applauding.
Happenstance restless sleepless happy dance.
Random Oscar maniac playing soccer.
Sleep Marauding apnea attacking a wrestling mocker.
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Re: Something To Forget Me By
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by softerware on
Tuesday, 3rd January 2017 @ 10:04:05 PM AEST
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Do you inspire comments, or what?
Such vivid images provoke the reader as conducively as they keep you awake! Funny how in dreams we (as you say) quantify ourselves worthless, the fruits of our labor forsaken!
Ragged insomnia should have us all in its grip if the imagination to pen such visions comes with it!
I would stay up all night to write a line like PULVERIZED DAGGERS STRIKE CURRENCY MISTAKEN. Yeow... stab us again! softerware |
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Re: Something To Forget Me By
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by unknown_utopia on
Thursday, 5th January 2017 @ 10:29:45 PM AEST
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wow
mind blown
excellent flow....
oh and no ones gonna forget you. |
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Re: Something To Forget Me By
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by Tiny_Tina on
Thursday, 12th January 2017 @ 07:02:02 PM AEST
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Crazy! In a good way. Like this a lot.
Thx,
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Re: Something To Forget Me By
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by Invierno on
Sunday, 15th January 2017 @ 06:51:07 PM AEST
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How cool! Love the anachronistic flavor.
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Re: Something To Forget Me By
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by shelby on
Saturday, 25th February 2017 @ 03:41:43 PM AEST
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I relate, well done, intense and well written too.
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Re: Something To Forget Me By
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by Breezy on
Wednesday, 1st November 2017 @ 08:37:12 PM AEST
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Well holy freaking hell, Scorp. So I guess
there is much I/'/ve been missing. Sorry
to have been gone so long....
I SO love the way you wrote this...it/'/s emotion
at its most raw. Brilliantly done as always. It
never fails to put me in awe, your poetry. Each
line, each syllable is like a full blown poem of
its own. Satisfying, but then another strike of
the pen and you are blown away again.
This was like a razor. Sharp and dangerous.
Beautiful writing, Scorpy. Miss your face! ^_^
~ Breezy
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Re: Something To Forget Me By
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by JamesStockdale on
Friday, 9th March 2018 @ 07:17:07 PM AEST
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You found out that you are unforgettable.
Welcome back my friend! |
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