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Astral Waltzes and Terran Tangos
Contributed by
xHeathenx
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Monday, 1st May 2017 @ 03:11:25 PM in AEST
Topic:
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//Graceful in taste
Prowess and power
Distress with finesse
Dancing they flower
The heavens they break
Into radiant showers
Such an elegant routine
Over thousands of hours
Dazzling through distance
Divine condensate
Eyes closed, hand on her face
Beckons and urges, his eager legs braced
His outstretched hand
Terrestrial sling
Her stellar dress sweeping
With her in a lean
Beaming they gleam
The scene of one/'/s dreams
Rocks knolls and cosmos
With space inbetween
Away she goes
Disperses in glitter
Away he falls
Crumbles in splinters
A wonderous waltz
Felt in the blink of an eye
Their story then ends
A memory gone by//
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Re: Astral Waltzes and Terran Tangos
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 1st May 2017 @ 07:03:08 PM AEST
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Wow, simply brilliant. You/'/re right, beautiful, sad, and romantic.
Thank you (he said with a lump in his throat). |
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Re: Astral Waltzes and Terran Tangos
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by alicewhite on
Tuesday, 2nd May 2017 @ 06:55:24 PM AEST
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| Beautiful and undulating , kept me captivated , as though I was hearing beautiful sounds , like a windchime x |
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Re: Astral Waltzes and Terran Tangos
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by Invierno on
Wednesday, 3rd May 2017 @ 08:56:46 PM AEST
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The first two stanzas were like /'/buttah/'/. I wish you had held the same perfection of flow throughout. It faltered on that initial scheme.
That said, I also fail to adhere to the first stanza schematic. It/'/s tough. Hell, even Shelly (my absolute fav of the whole bloody lot of us crazy poets) can/'/t hold it together throughout.
Mark, a brilliant poem in both content and style. You are coming alone very well.
Mike |
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Re: Astral Waltzes and Terran Tangos
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by irisblue on
Thursday, 4th May 2017 @ 09:57:05 PM AEST
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Mark,
this is my favorite poem of yours thus far!!!! It touched my heart and moved my soul, beautiful and perfect my friend! !! Lovely.
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Re: Astral Waltzes and Terran Tangos
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by unknown_utopia on
Wednesday, 10th May 2017 @ 11:12:19 PM AEST
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A wondrous waltz indeed
well done.... |
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