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crucible
Contributed by
Jigget
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Friday, 26th May 2017 @ 01:47:11 AM in AEST
Topic:
drugabuse
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crucible.
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been feeling never for forever now
undertowed, rolled over
prototypical end result
head frozen on cold shoulders
sunset like a slit wrist
clouds that bleed tornado twist
a fog of illogical rainbows kissed
pain in a puddle. a vein in the mist.
bent like a backwards wind
leashed to tree after tree
chasing stars that want their dust back
the stardust inside of me.
joshua howell
may 25, 2017
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Jigget
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Re: crucible
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by Invierno on
Friday, 26th May 2017 @ 08:29:12 PM AEST
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brilliant, as always. Dude, I got you note. Will be gettin with you. Bummed me I haven/'/t yet.
What a gift you have. I know how you can double it.
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Re: crucible
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 27th May 2017 @ 02:08:37 AM AEST
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brilliant silt as far as she could go
with time running inter-spaced
I felt almost asleep like a stone
reading this, but I were not
last I was sure.
wonderful piece for sure!
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Re: crucible
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by softerware on
Saturday, 27th May 2017 @ 04:29:21 PM AEST
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Compelling to say the least.
The first line sets the stage for the montage that follows. Like reading a book by the light of a strobe, the images come in snippets, letting the reader write the rest. This is a very engaging style.
The last line speaks to your self esteem, and despite the angst of your write, you leave me with hope that all will be well THE STARDUST INSIDE OF ME.
I held my breath reading this, and didn/'/t realize it until that line! This is not only a write, it is an experience.
thank you for the offering! softerware |
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Re: crucible
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by Puppy_dog_eyes on
Friday, 7th July 2017 @ 05:35:35 PM AEST
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I couldn/'/t actually find a line in the whole poem that I didn/'/t like or felt was superfluous.
You certainly have a gift for your art,....perhaps it is indeed the perfect write? (or do we always think we can do better ?)
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