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As the Darkness Comes In
Contributed by
allforyou
on
Wednesday, 21st June 2017 @ 01:04:29 PM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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She is weeping...
As the darkness comes in, creeping,
crawling in between the sheets;
cuddling until she sleeps.
And its sweeping...
As the darkness comes in, seaping.
(in) the most shallow, the most deep,
of the shadows that she keeps.
Now she/'/s leaping...
As the darkness comes in, reaping-
swiftly chase her to the streets.
Sweet dream ends. Alarm beeps.
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allforyou
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2017-06-21 13:04:29]
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Re: As the Darkness Comes In
(User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 21st June 2017 @ 04:18:54 PM AEST
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| Poetry about insomnia. My favourite. Really well written. The rhyme scheme is excellent. Love this one |
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Re: As the Darkness Comes In
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 23rd June 2017 @ 03:04:37 AM AEST
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I am not sure this is about insomnia
when too many children want to sleep.
from the collective of the now in the plurals
the plurals of cliffs, the plurals of roaming
a collective of living now
not tomorrow, when tomorrow
seems gone
where does a young girl go
sleeping all the time
And not moving not twisting
away far from the day to think
when somehow there is never enough
time
the shadow of connection or maybe
the failure is it a failure not to try
something is different
children feel things more pronounced
than their counterparts,
the adults
I did once.
I think most my age did
too
nothing/s easy
people don/t say
depression
where you have to invent
a way out of something
of something that is real
It truly is hard
I think I remember that much.
anyway do the best you can
as you know you will never
give up
on any life
this poem very much
sticks with me, I see it
all around with children
these days
thank you allforyou!
Peace!
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Re: As the Darkness Comes In
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by The_Phantom on
Sunday, 25th June 2017 @ 05:19:24 AM AEST
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A deep interesting write
Thank you for sharing
The Phantom |
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Re: As the Darkness Comes In
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by softerware on
Sunday, 25th June 2017 @ 11:59:49 AM AEST
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I love the rhythm you planned for this...and let me assure you, I was holding my breath until the alarm beeped! What excellent craftsmanship it takes to end with a huge collective sigh of relief!
Most entertaining!
softerware
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Re: As the Darkness Comes In
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by MoonlitAngel on
Friday, 7th July 2017 @ 11:40:15 PM AEST
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| this is so good! even with how short it is, I felt like I was reading a story! and it pulled me in the whole way through. well done! |
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Re: As the Darkness Comes In
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by Kane on
Thursday, 13th July 2017 @ 05:13:53 PM AEST
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Thank you for sharing
Kane |
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