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Night Crawler
Contributed by
unknown_utopia
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Wednesday, 21st June 2017 @ 11:37:31 PM in AEST
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Im creeping
as you are sleeping
Im wanting
to touch you,
fascination flows
as I
slip into your room....
I watch you
as you are dreaming
I taste your essence
and its
oh
so beautiful.
Floorboards creaking
shadows dancing
you open your eyes
and I
fade from view.
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2017-06-21 23:37:31]
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Re: Night Crawler
(User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on
Friday, 23rd June 2017 @ 02:22:44 AM AEST
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I think this character in this poem
sees the real you
it might be a compilation
of sounds and thought
reactions or non-reactions
the word beautiful
by itself is supposed to be
magical while at the same time
far-fetched over-used
poorly defined, even vain,
less than, skin deep
then you say creeping
the viewer, like an inanimate
group of objects that surround
the person, the one who sleeps,
and then, you use the word, fascination,
fluidly
the I fades, from view,
meaning
meaning
meaning
I like it man!
Your brain works quite well !
Peace!
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Re: Night Crawler
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by softerware on
Sunday, 25th June 2017 @ 11:39:01 AM AEST
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Etherial, sensual, and spooky!
First you scare us; then you seduce us; and then, like so many whispered promises, you evaporate in the light of day!
A smorgasbord of emotions washed over me as I read this. Powerful stuff. Visually vivid and executed in brevity. Hats off to the author!
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