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My Sum of Some Summits
Contributed by
xHeathenx
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Saturday, 28th October 2017 @ 06:08:32 AM in AEST
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In a dog-eat-dog world,
I/'/ve been a rodent
Scouring my sorrows,
To seek fleeting wisdom
In the shadow of giants,
I watched from afar
Avoided my capsize,
And suspicious wry eyes
Climbing in silence,
Auspicious and brash;
Upon rock I had found her,
My sum of some summits
Dear peer of year yester and near
I beheld her in wonder;
Astonished- astounded
For she bore me the sun
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Re: My Sum of Some Summits
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by softerware on
Saturday, 28th October 2017 @ 07:01:56 PM AEST
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We love people who met our expectations. They, after all, are what we deserve.
ASTONISHED -ASTOUNDED FOR SHE BORE ME THE SUN.
Your poem does not tell us the ending, but leaves us delightfully optimistic!
By allowing us to write our own finale, we have no cause to disagree. You have offered us ownership of your poem.
An unexpected gift awaits us, complete with flourishes and bows, and a warm thank you to the generous author who gives away what most would keep, and trusts us to finish his story.
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Re: My Sum of Some Summits
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by JamesStockdale on
Sunday, 29th October 2017 @ 10:53:37 PM AEST
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| Quaintly superb! |
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Re: My Sum of Some Summits
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by Puppy_dog_eyes on
Friday, 3rd November 2017 @ 05:57:54 AM AEST
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Loved the title, so like a fish I was reeled in by the bait.
I wasn/'/t disappointed.
Nice work and clever wordplay.
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