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The Abyss
Contributed by
MoonlitAngel
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Wednesday, 28th February 2018 @ 04:11:17 AM in AEST
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I step up to the plate just like anybody else
but you don`t see the way my will melts
there is something lingering in my peripheral
a black hole, strangely ethereal
following me everywhere I go
it`s been there since so long ago
forced smiles and dug out silver linings
aren`t enough to keep me compromising
I get the strangest feeling I should be somewhere else
`cause no one knows all the pain I`ve felt
but it`s such a cliche to say I am adrift
and that this life just feels makeshift
put one foot in front of the other
every day one after another
but nowhere I go feels like home
and I`m only seeing in monochrome
clocks ticking away
I see the seasons change
but nothing changes
and nothing I see
means anything to me
what is this disease?
why am I more comfortable living in discomfort?
staying with all the ghosts I`ve suffered?
will I ever have a place to stay that feels lived in?
instead of nothingness to drift in
sometimes I think about getting gone
as if I`m not already gone
I keep staring into this abyss
wondering just what there is to miss
I`m catching my breath
but it catches on death
this heart in my chest
is losing its beat
a life so incomplete
at best bittersweet
Copyright ©
MoonlitAngel
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2018-02-28 04:11:17]
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Re: The Abyss
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by emystar on
Wednesday, 28th February 2018 @ 08:04:59 AM AEST
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Wow, I know a masterpiece when I see one,
U had me from the title to the last. be proud u did this with class as pazaz
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Re: The Abyss
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by softerware on
Wednesday, 28th February 2018 @ 11:37:04 PM AEST
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This is beautiful written. We are reminded that to experience that feeling of belonging and familiarity, we first must venture into the unknown and build the bridges that become friendship and routine.
We truly do have to MAKE home. It isn/'/t somewhere out there -- as Dorothy discovered in the Wizard of Oz.
A wonderful tale disguised as a fable and served up on a carefully crafted platter of art and emotion.
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Re: The Abyss
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by unknown_utopia on
Saturday, 3rd March 2018 @ 02:09:35 AM AEST
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So sad
yet beautifully done
you expressed so well the feeling of disconnect
and
the longing to belong many feel |
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Re: The Abyss
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by Puppy_dog_eyes on
Saturday, 10th March 2018 @ 02:03:10 AM AEST
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The emotion flows powerfully from every pore of this poem.
You can never truly feel someone else/'/s pain in the same way that they do , but I really got as close to that as I could with the words you offered out.
Powerful stuff
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Re: The Abyss
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by hauntedscorp on
Saturday, 10th March 2018 @ 03:15:20 PM AEST
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Right in the feels, old timer..!!!
WTG Dee, as impressive and wonderfully expressed as ever. Love the attention and pattern in place with your rhyme and near rhyme scheme. Well done.
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