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Blinded
Contributed by
dbl0jen
on
Saturday, 3rd March 2018 @ 08:26:04 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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I don/'/t know how you do it.
How you keep sincerity in your eyes.
When all you/'/ve done,.... to me... it seems
is lie time after time.
All the times you said you LOVED ME
I believed you through and through
The only reason I BELIEVED,..... i think
was because I was in love with YOU.
I WANTED to believe you,
I NEEDED it to be true
BECAUSE I was in love with you.
Looking back over the years,
at all the hundreds of little clues.
I should have seen the truth.
But my love completely blinded me
and i couldn/'/t see the real you.
Years ago I could FEEL your love,
I could SEE it in your eyes.
But its been a long long time now, my love
Since I/'/ve seen ANY feeling in those eyes.
Your touch holds no compassion,
Your words are only lies.
The MAN I love does not exist,
He was only a cruel disguise.
Copyright ©
dbl0jen
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2018-03-03 20:26:04]
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Re: Blinded
(User Rating: 1 )
by softerware on
Sunday, 4th March 2018 @ 11:20:27 PM AEST
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Wow. Your tale is a forewarning none of us will take. Love gets in the way of many things - the least of which is common sense!
Your conversational style makes this read feel like you/'/re speaking directly to your us. In spite of the topic, your tone contains compassion. You have taken what could have been a bitter retort and framed it into a story that is truthful and reflects your graciousness. Pity the poor guy who let you go. Definitely his loss. |
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Re: Blinded
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by nightwolf on
Tuesday, 6th March 2018 @ 04:50:10 PM AEST
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| Well written. Sad and very relatable. |
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Re: Blinded
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by hauntedscorp on
Friday, 9th March 2018 @ 11:35:15 PM AEST
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Oh, this is never a good feeling ... You capture it so well and I like to think it began as a note to someone, and eventually transformed into this heave of emotion.
From a writing standpoint I would suggest that too many words in CAPS takes away from the intended purpose.
I just read one of your older works too and it was amazing.
~Scorp
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