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3 Lb. Thread
Contributed by
invierno
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Saturday, 3rd March 2018 @ 11:45:33 PM in AEST
Topic:
Nostalgic
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Discovering I was a mannequin shredded
ingrained Prime Directives,
exposing truths as fruit eaten only by eyes
relaxing focus,
swimming beyond mans arranged atoms,
where walls disappear,
where air stills for the stare,
where curtains quit breathing.
I should have been stitched
with 3 Lb. thread,
but the makers fiber met their need;
alas, I was built to unravel,
to last only so long,
and I did,
but my eyes, once opened to my life unused,
left cheap thread, there alone, ironically strong.
Copyright ©
invierno
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2018-03-03 23:45:33]
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Re: 3 Lb. Thread
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by emystar on
Sunday, 4th March 2018 @ 08:54:30 AM AEST
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Bravo
Thanks I needed that
hugs,
emy
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Re: 3 Lb. Thread
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by JamesStockdale on
Sunday, 4th March 2018 @ 09:34:15 PM AEST
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Funny and sad but so true. I always overdid things to an obsessive degree but as time goes by I figure I/'/ll never need that kind of quality now. Why pay for a 50 year roof when I have a max of 20 left plus my wallet is thinner these days too. Well done and I liked how you defined it all.
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Re: 3 Lb. Thread
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by softerware on
Sunday, 4th March 2018 @ 11:27:02 PM AEST
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We should be made of 20 lb test, but as you say, we are built to be obsolete.
The will to live is incredibly stubborn, far outlasting our ability to thrive.
I like the analogy of thread to weave a tapestry of life, and the journey to where CURTAINS QUIT BREATHING.
softerware
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Re: 3 Lb. Thread
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by nightwolf on
Tuesday, 6th March 2018 @ 04:46:47 PM AEST
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| I loved your metaphors. Brilliant |
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Re: 3 Lb. Thread
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by ming on
Friday, 9th March 2018 @ 03:51:12 PM AEST
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Excellent metaphors!
ming |
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Re: 3 Lb. Thread
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by Puppy_dog_eyes on
Saturday, 10th March 2018 @ 01:42:54 AM AEST
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Have to echo the sentiments of those who have already sung your praises here.
Great write,
We aren/'/t built to last that/'/s true, but we are a determined bunch!!
Steve |
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Re: 3 Lb. Thread
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by hauntedscorp on
Saturday, 10th March 2018 @ 04:55:14 AM AEST
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Great closing lines on an altogether well stitched piece :)
Wonderful wordplay, this was an enjoyable read. Bravo!
~Scorp |
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