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Dreams And Dust
Contributed by
puppy_dog_eyes
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Saturday, 10th March 2018 @ 01:26:39 AM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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Tick, tock, time steals another second
As the mind slips back into white noise
And meandering plains of abstract thought.
The zenith has long since faded
Dwells far over the horizon
Keeps its alliance with the confidence of youth
And the bright palette of discovery.
Always in motion, days face inward
With the here and the now.
Barely seconds for sentiment
Pathways of belief eroded by doubt.
We filter out ambition
Paint it over with faint excuses.
The heart still craves but the head presides
Bandaged in reality, protected from self.
Only in the darkness does the choral voice sing
Dancing through sleep with the offer of hope.
As the faint glow of dawn creeps into the room
We shrug off our dreams and they crumble to dust.
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Re: Dreams And Dust
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by JamesStockdale on
Saturday, 10th March 2018 @ 02:04:34 AM AEST
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Brilliantly word intensive with a great flow.
A very unique write and true from my own experience. We know not what tomorrow may bring. Bravo! |
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Re: Dreams And Dust
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by hauntedscorp on
Saturday, 10th March 2018 @ 04:29:17 AM AEST
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This is bursting with brilliant scenery as your choice words create the scene. The usage of both dreams and dust is interesting symbolism here.
A fading melancholy exists, and yet one could draw hope from that last line.
The dust could be strength in this case- shrugging off the dream and focusing on the action, or getting down to business.
The whole- dreams are important, but if we dont take action then the dreams cannot become reality- scenario.
This of course is where the symbolism took me in this write, but mostly it left me feeling like words are fun, and I enjoyed this a lot!
~Scorp |
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Re: Dreams And Dust
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by Spike on
Saturday, 10th March 2018 @ 05:30:48 AM AEST
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Indeed, life has a way of drawing the parameters of here and now, and pulling us to the centre. The itch won/'/t go away until it is scratched, though. Nicely worded - emotional, genuine, insightful of the process.
S. |
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Re: Dreams And Dust
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by emystar on
Saturday, 10th March 2018 @ 10:11:54 AM AEST
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awesome write, friend. I/'/ve been gone. Glad u r back too. |
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Re: Dreams And Dust
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by navydocny on
Saturday, 10th March 2018 @ 09:21:36 PM AEST
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Everything goes to the dust...it is sad when dreams do....
good job! |
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Re: Dreams And Dust
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by softerware on
Sunday, 11th March 2018 @ 01:59:26 AM AEST
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so rich with thought provoking phrases and descriptions. You have a disarming talent for rendering in words what we experience in the inner mind.
To say I relate to your writing would be a disheartening understatement. You have found a way to read our minds and reveal what we feel and think in the most entertaining and compelling rhyme.
I am amazed. Truly.
softerware
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Re: Dreams And Dust
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by Invierno on
Sunday, 11th March 2018 @ 11:58:45 AM AEST
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"The heart still craves but the head presides
Bandaged in reality"
What a line!
"As the faint glow of dawn creeps into the room
We shrug off our dreams and they crumble to dust."
So sad....so true.
You have achieved something special here. Thank you for allowing me to step into your world.
Invierno
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Re: Dreams And Dust
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by Durango on
Thursday, 15th March 2018 @ 02:32:51 PM AEST
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| Well thoughtout. Great quotable lines. You/'/ve captured a large animal with this & now it is your trophy on the wall. |
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