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Outside
Contributed by
MoonlitAngel
on
Saturday, 31st March 2018 @ 12:30:26 AM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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I match your smiles
I laugh `cause I think I should
you let me in
but I don`t fit in so good
I stand outside
of your rose-tinted windows
a spectator
indistinct from the shadows
I come back home
hoping for sanctuary
but broken vows
have become customary
I am quiet
and quiet drowns in all this noise
I get so small
from trying to keep my poise
this shell, it cracks
the heat simmers underneath
a broken mask
falls away from what`s beneath
I am exposed
and boiling over at last
I try to scream
but find that the moment... has passed
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MoonlitAngel
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2018-03-31 00:30:26]
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Re: Outside
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by JamesStockdale on
Saturday, 31st March 2018 @ 09:12:49 PM AEST
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Great poem. I have felt the same exact way many times. Not really comfortable with my surroundings. But, you are not abnormal. We all feel the same way at times.
Happy Easter! |
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Re: Outside
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 1st April 2018 @ 03:24:08 AM AEST
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very beautiful poem!
missing the moment to scream
outside, far;
I wonder if it
were a freedom
that escapes
in the raw natural
sense
some intuition
zen like, given
a name
this really touched
my heart
Peace!
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Re: Outside
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by unknown_utopia on
Monday, 2nd April 2018 @ 04:34:38 AM AEST
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yes yes I have been that spectator too
good poem... |
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Re: Outside
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by Sagefairy on
Wednesday, 4th April 2018 @ 04:51:20 AM AEST
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| So much into the emotions and yet detached from them - excellent portrayal. Been there from time to time. My favorite part is the expert ending of the last four lines. I think once upon a time, I was one with rose-tinted glasses myself. Blessings To you MA |
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Re: Outside
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by Durango on
Thursday, 5th April 2018 @ 07:23:02 AM AEST
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| You place the reader in the tenor of the poem. We are sorting through it and feeling the movement of the words you/'/ve chosen. |
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