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Meat In A Suicide Sandwich
Contributed by
invierno
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Monday, 14th May 2018 @ 08:59:53 PM in AEST
Topic:
anguished
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Such a sandwich as I find myself-
the meat twixt two slices bread;
I, the life, the meat and matter
to slices Son and Father seeking death.
Oh, father as unknown to me as
that rock in that quarry somewhere;
not a crack or squeak but
a failed suicide;
how thoughtful, odd
to make that your half century final share.
A life as a rock in a quarry;
thanks for the update; now I know you care.
Or, perhaps youre just stoned.
Son, you slice of bread upon me,
pressing threat of death,
your elaborate attempts,
all to fail in knowing there was never a need,
but,
in time,
I may become the bread upon which you,
the meat sit anew,
growing your own slice of bread above to be pressed upon;
me, below to fret upon.
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invierno
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2018-05-14 20:59:53]
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Re: Meat In A Suicide Sandwich
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by WellEyeDo on
Tuesday, 15th May 2018 @ 12:13:33 AM AEST
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| Thank you for sharing. From the context it seems as though it was not an easy one to write. One day I hope the world shares in the realization of happiness... |
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Re: Meat In A Suicide Sandwich
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by softerware on
Tuesday, 15th May 2018 @ 01:39:01 AM AEST
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No matter how old they get, family is always tugging at our sleeve. We worry, fret, and obsess over them. I believe it is called love. And in some form, as your poem reveals, we are all afflicted.
Your line-- OR, PERHAPS YOU/'/RE JUST STONED-- took me by surprise.
Your conclusion, that the circle is going to close in reverse, is a reminder that what we take care of today, will be taking care of us one day (hopefully! )
softerware
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Re: Meat In A Suicide Sandwich
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by ming on
Tuesday, 15th May 2018 @ 03:40:23 PM AEST
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I also was a little surprised by the line, perhaps you/'/re just stoned. But then I was entranced how it fit with the rocks/quarry stanza. Powerful write.
ming |
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Re: Meat In A Suicide Sandwich
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by JamesStockdale on
Wednesday, 16th May 2018 @ 12:01:34 AM AEST
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What a sobering write.
I often think I wouldn/'/t have a care in the world if I only had myself to worry about.
But that isn/'/t how reality works.
We all grow old before our time. |
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Re: Meat In A Suicide Sandwich
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by speedy on
Friday, 18th May 2018 @ 10:45:49 PM AEST
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| Very thought provoking. Good write. |
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