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The Thirst
Contributed by
unknown_utopia
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Thursday, 24th May 2018 @ 01:48:45 PM in AEST
Topic:
anguished
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schizophrenic flesh
cracks and drifts in the breeze
a gemini has no constant
for ever everything is always changing
todays line is yesterdays memory
come tomorrow who will I be
I exist as a ghostly apparition
unable to move on
not knowing what is real
I thought I was driving
but how can that be
if I am only a wheel
I cringe at my reflection
as I mingle with the others
playing the game is very disturbing
I do not want anything
just got a feeling I should be doing more
and I do want to be somebody
you can see the hunger
in the ravines of my mind
but you can not know the thirst of my need
whispering moans fall like snow flakes
vortex of existence needs surgery
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2018-05-24 13:48:45]
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Re: The Thirst
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by JamesStockdale on
Friday, 25th May 2018 @ 11:34:08 PM AEST
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That first stanza hits hard.
Deeply anguished. Second to the last stanza is the reality of life. Totally what average people feel. If they say no, they are full of it. Very powerful write. |
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Re: The Thirst
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by MoonlitAngel on
Saturday, 23rd June 2018 @ 06:04:11 PM AEST
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| I love this!! the very first line sucked me in and the rest did not disappoint! I relate to the feelings expressed here too. that sense of not being sure where you/'/re going or what you/'/re doing, but knowing that you want to be doing something and getting somewhere. overall, just excellent! |
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