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[title] => Seagulls Fly
[time] => 2019-05-20 13:31:23
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[bodytext] => As the seagulls fly high in the air
I`m trapped in a sea of despair
My thoughts are neither here nor there
To keep my sanity, I must beware
I`m heading into treacherous seas
In my condition, it`s no place to be
I hope the kind of life I now see
Isn`t all that`s to be
I guess I`ll have to wait and see
What my future shall be.
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Seagulls Fly
Contributed by
jamesstockdale
on
Monday, 20th May 2019 @ 01:31:23 PM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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As the seagulls fly high in the air
I`m trapped in a sea of despair
My thoughts are neither here nor there
To keep my sanity, I must beware
I`m heading into treacherous seas
In my condition, it`s no place to be
I hope the kind of life I now see
Isn`t all that`s to be
I guess I`ll have to wait and see
What my future shall be.
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jamesstockdale
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2019-05-20 13:31:23] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Seagulls Fly
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Monday, 20th May 2019 @ 11:34:25 PM AEST (User
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((((( JIMMY )))))
About all any of us can do. Nicely done, brother.
Timmy
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Re: Seagulls Fly
(User Rating: 1 ) by thelaststraw on
Tuesday, 21st May 2019 @ 03:37:32 PM AEST (User
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Great title brought me into the poem. The first four lines have strength, then you seem to drift and settle with no answer which I was looking for. Nice write thanks for sharing. |
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Re: Seagulls Fly
(User Rating: 1 ) by softerware on
Tuesday, 21st May 2019 @ 04:48:36 PM AEST (User
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Inertia is so frustrating. Like being made to sit in a chair in the corner; an endless time out.
The last four lines are a declaration of surrender. What doesn/'/t challenge us doesn/'/t change us either.
I was hoping your hero would rise up, declare war, and swim for all he is worth.
Alas, we have left him floating at the mercy of the tide. Unable, like the seagulls, to fly.
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Re: Seagulls Fly
(User Rating: 1 ) by ingeniusidiot on
Wednesday, 22nd May 2019 @ 12:38:41 PM AEST (User
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You make the seagulls appear to be buzzards circling
dead animal. Or even better still another version of
Alfred Hitchcock/'/s The Birds. But I have to agree
with Jaye that as you are reading you are expecting
the hero to fight for his life as he is heading
dangerous waters.
Maybe the seagulls will swoop down, pick him up
and carry him to safety.
Interesting piece my friend
Rich |
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Re: Seagulls Fly
(User Rating: 1 ) by Jigget on
Thursday, 23rd May 2019 @ 12:26:28 AM AEST (User
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Nice. I/'/m of the opine that MOST poets should rhyme more than they do.
Side note: Nice length, mister.
Thanks for commenting on my stuff for years and years now. |
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Re: Seagulls Fly
(User Rating: 1 ) by Jecks on
Friday, 24th May 2019 @ 01:17:22 PM AEST (User
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I like both the structure and rhyme of your poem. As for the content, we all get tired of fighting at times. I hope you find the strength to fight again, for once we give up we are truly lost. |
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