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[title] => Mirror image twins Venus effect
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[bodytext] => There is a rainbow piercing my eye
Bleeding me dry
I spy with my little eye
a rain a rrow a bow
Peircing my side
I see its true colours
Eyes wide shut
Open wide
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Mirror image twins Venus effect
Contributed by
alicewhite
on
Sunday, 26th May 2019 @ 06:11:01 PM in AEST
Topic:
schoolproblems
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There is a rainbow piercing my eye
Bleeding me dry
I spy with my little eye
a rain a rrow a bow
Peircing my side
I see its true colours
Eyes wide shut
Open wide
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Re: Mirror image twins Venus effect
(User Rating: 1 ) by JamesStockdale on
Monday, 27th May 2019 @ 07:02:11 PM AEST (User
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Many still have bad dreams about school until the day they die. That tells you how bad it can be. Sad! |
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Re: Mirror image twins Venus effect
(User Rating: 1 ) by Jecks on
Tuesday, 28th May 2019 @ 01:31:55 PM AEST (User
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I like the combination of both the metaphor and abstract. I do have trouble with the 5th line, but perhaps I`m missing the meaning behind that one. Overall I like it. |
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Re: Mirror image twins Venus effect
(User Rating: 1 ) by hauntedscorp on
Sunday, 30th June 2019 @ 09:29:30 PM AEST (User
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That first line is brilliant and I delight in the abstract and just-out-of-reach nature to this piece. Ya still got it, honey! Keep it up.
~Scorp |
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Re: Mirror image twins Venus effect
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Thursday, 4th July 2019 @ 08:10:06 AM AEST (User
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Sun
Light
Shines
Hikers
Hike
Beneath
Vernal
Falls
ITS
Array
It is
Good
To
Carry
The
View
While
The
Waters
Flow
Down
From
High
And we move
because we
can with every
thing we have
Into
The
Light
Because
I cannot
do it
all
my
own
because
I/'/m
carrying
a torch
And
you
know
how
much
it/'/s
worth
because
I/'/m
carrying
a
torch
part of it
is
Van
Morrison
And
part
of it
comes
from
the
night
sky
It/'/s
just
the
collective
Sun
AND
SOME
THINK
THE
WHOLE
WORLD
HAS
GONE
ASTRAY
IN
ASTRAL
TERMS,
THERE
IS
NO
RELIGION
Here
Today.
why don/'/t you
love your neighbor
why can/'/t you
ever be so meek.
that/'/s why
I care
about
Alice
white
someone
I don/'/t
even know
Peace! |
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Re: Mirror image twins Venus effect
(User Rating: 1 ) by Puppy_dog_eyes on
Saturday, 6th July 2019 @ 12:30:53 AM AEST (User
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Lovely work and great imagery
I remember school, it wasn/'/t the happiest time of my life but I got through it.
I read it twice, I liked it so much the first time I had to.
Steve |
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