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My Favourite Need
Contributed by
chenobi
on
Wednesday, 16th July 2003 @ 07:05:00 PM in AEST
Topic:
LoveRemembered
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In the heat of the moment
In the heat of the night
I often dare to fantasize
About that continious foreign light
And you are in it
Everytime
So when time flies me there
And I arrive
Every glass gets too deep to see the wine
Dirty thoughts enter the mind
And you are in them
Everytime
But then loneliness comes in
And there is water by the wine
There is a place but will you hide
My eyes yearn to find you
Everytime
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chenobi
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2003-07-16 19:05:00]
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Re: My Favourite Need
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by PhantomsLDY on
Wednesday, 16th July 2003 @ 08:24:30 PM AEST
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| Sadly sweet. |
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Re: My Favourite Need
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by garyh on
Thursday, 17th July 2003 @ 06:53:26 PM AEST
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nicely written..
i think that the 3rd and 4th lines of the 2nd stanza need a little work though... wine and mind just don't go together too well... seems a little off from the way the rythem was going..
anyways.. good luck! and keep writting :D |
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Re: My Favourite Need
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by karoody on
Saturday, 26th July 2003 @ 07:18:04 AM AEST
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beautifull written...i would change nothing in this write...your emotions show very well in this write...
kara |
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