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love me
Contributed by
tinka_belle
on
Saturday, 19th July 2003 @ 06:35:00 AM in AEST
Topic:
AngryPoetry
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dont ask me why
when i cry
just hold me
touch me
love me
dont push me away
when i ask you to stay
just want me
hug me
love me
dont yell and sceam
when you want to leave
just be there
want to
love me
dont have no money to spend
when on you i depend
just buy it
try to
love me
dont want to *****
when we've twice had bad luck
just trust me
***** me
love me
dont hang up the phone
when you're at home
just hold on
slow down
love me
dont put me number one
at work have more fun
just make an effort
forget it
love me
dont go when its time
adore goodbyes
just take a minute
enjoy it
love me
dont walk off when you're mad
leave me to be sad
just come back
calm down
love me
dont keep it inside
your anger dont hide
just hit me
break me
hate me
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Re: love me
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by venkat on
Saturday, 19th July 2003 @ 07:00:16 AM AEST
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| Last stanza makes me wonder.... it is sad.. venkat |
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Re: love me
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by MoonlitAngel on
Saturday, 19th July 2003 @ 07:37:50 AM AEST
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For the first several stanzas I could completely relate... not so much to the last half or so, though. I found this to be compelling. Drew me right in and had my full attention. Captivating. Wonderful job, I thoroughly enjoyed the read.
~ Moonlit |
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Re: love me
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by 2timesX on
Saturday, 19th July 2003 @ 09:50:21 AM AEST
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| it is a sad poem.. but i like it |
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Re: love me
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by norm on
Saturday, 19th July 2003 @ 10:47:13 AM AEST
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The poetic construction is good
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Masochism is a form of self hate
Normality finds it hard to relate,
Everything's fine til you invite self abuse
That seems terribly, awfully obtuse...
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Re: love me
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by Eloise on
Saturday, 19th July 2003 @ 10:54:11 AM AEST
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| Its so... original... the way you write is something i have never seen befiore but i like it. And the ending... it sounds like something i use to go through. Good write. |
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Re: love me
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by stargazer on
Sunday, 20th July 2003 @ 04:58:19 PM AEST
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Defiantly drew me in. This was a different approach and for that it was very well done. The last stanza however, was a little nerve-wrecking but good never the less.
-Amy |
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