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untitled
Contributed by
fallensilence
on
Friday, 25th July 2003 @ 06:05:00 PM in AEST
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you'll never understand me the way that she does
lying in your glory you aim to please
but you never can
im bored if thats what you want
im happy for once it seems
with her by my side, my trophy
but my bruises and your fists
you aim to please only if i resist
the blazing sun right above
the shade is god
tears that drop from my eyes
i'm scared if thats what you were waiting for
look at yourself you seem so cheap
im lonely but ive said that many time before
your fists and the bruises left
this gun aimed straight at my head.
this is my winter, the night after a long hot day,
this is the end.
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2003-07-25 18:05:00]
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Re: untitled
(User Rating: 1 )
by afraid_of_fear on
Sunday, 12th October 2003 @ 06:42:31 AM AEST
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I liked this, and even though there wasn't a specific flow, i think each line still had something to say, if you know what i mean. I thought these two lines were the strongest:
your fists and the bruises left
this gun aimed straight at my head.
good write
charlotte x_x_x |
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