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Frozen Suicide
Contributed by
MysticalDarkness
on
Saturday, 26th July 2003 @ 05:05:00 PM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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Quietly she whispers, soft words of regret
Trying to remember, what not to forget
Her blood boils, within her veins
Giving up so easily, to all of these pains
Her eyes glow, within the fire
She wont let her body, give in to its desire
so many dreams, none of them are real
So many broken bones, none of which will heal
She falls to the ground, in fatal truth
Her sudden temptation, goes beyond her youth
The beating of her heart, is coming to an end
She stares at the sky, as her breathing starts to descend
Her beauty has faded, into something stronger
The exsistence of death, will be around longer
Calling for denial and shame
Only god, will speak her name
Frozen river, keeps her still
Its only on her mind, the thought of kill kill kill
Breaking out of chains, she's lost all control
Heaven will not let her in, her rage has become too full
Binding herself to suicide, She'll be frozen to her heart
The fires of hell, will have to break her apart
Controlling every thought, but losing all her dreams
To her, death is exactly what it seems
Melting in her body, she'll slowly burn away
She's not gonna make it, there's nothing more to say
Getting washed away, from the wild ocean tide
This is the result, of her frozen suicide!!
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MysticalDarkness
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2003-07-26 17:05:00]
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Re: Frozen Suicide
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by ArdRi79 on
Saturday, 26th July 2003 @ 06:27:21 PM AEST
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I really like the way the 7tha nd 9th lines relate to each other
"She falls to the ground, in fatal truth" is a great mix of imagery and metaphor. nice and a little disturbing.
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Re: Frozen Suicide
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by Ilhar on
Saturday, 26th July 2003 @ 07:31:53 PM AEST
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very well written vivid and draws you in, not usually my type of poem but very well done
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Re: Frozen Suicide
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by yellow_sundragon on
Saturday, 26th July 2003 @ 07:33:49 PM AEST
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I love this. The flow, the meaning, I mean, This is deep! So good.....
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