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My 'once' Love
Contributed by
Unaekseveer1
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Saturday, 10th August 2002 @ 03:05:21 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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My Love you are more Beautiful
Than all my eyes can see,
In this life thats so confusing
You are the clearest thing to me.
Youve shown me that theres life
Beyond these closed four walls,
I know now Im in Love with You
Before I wouldn't admit at all.
As Im looking at your photo
How I long to Kiss your lips,
And to feel your goosies rising
To the touch of my fingertips.
Your silky hair, Your bright wide eyes,
Your fingernails or lack of,
Your happy smile and your cute little ears
Arent all that I can think of!
I think of all youd tell me
And things which Ive told you,
I think about our future
Places well visit and stuff well do.
If only now I could be with you
Id squeeze and hold you tight,
Wed find a beach to stroll along
And make love in the sand, all night.
Come home to me soon my sweetheart
Come back and hold hands with me,
I promise to you Ill wash them
When Ive been to the loo for a wee.
I cant wait to hear you purring
When all else is quiet at night,
I cant wait for us to go shopping
We will not squabble, yeah right!
Copyright ©
Unaekseveer1
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Re: My 'once' Love
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by Suzy on
Saturday, 10th August 2002 @ 04:19:48 PM AEST
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This one kind of made me laugh a little when I got to the second to the last stanza....another good write you have here...
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Re: My 'once' Love
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by humphdj on
Saturday, 10th August 2002 @ 07:25:01 PM AEST
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Made me giggle too........wasn't expecting to when I started to read....but you laid the trap so well
Good write
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Re: My 'once' Love
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by Unaekseveer1 on
Saturday, 10th August 2002 @ 09:27:11 PM AEST
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Hi Lasca, I said my vocab. was limited! I just had to look up 'stanza' in the dictionary, now I see!
Thankyou for your kind words and the educaton!
With love
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Re: My 'once' Love
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by Unaekseveer1 on
Saturday, 10th August 2002 @ 09:31:42 PM AEST
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Hi Dave, I think this maybe the problem! I always use (what I hope to be) comedy, as defense! But I'm glad when it gets a smile.
With love
Dean |
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Re: My 'once' Love
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by Chrissie on
Sunday, 11th August 2002 @ 01:43:59 AM AEST
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I love the humour in this ...veiling the hurt maybe? Lovely poem.
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Re: My 'once' Love
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by Unaekseveer1 on
Sunday, 11th August 2002 @ 03:14:19 AM AEST
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Thankyou Chrissie, Hmmmm Maybe?
I like that you like
With love
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Re: My 'once' Love
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by chatabox on
Sunday, 11th August 2002 @ 07:15:30 AM AEST
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lol...men go shopping...NEVER!!! and as for washing their hands.....mmm not sure, I`ll take your word for it.
Me thinks you do hide behind your comedy stance too.........but then, we all have barriers.
Great write me dear.
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Re: My 'once' Love
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by Unaekseveer1 on
Sunday, 11th August 2002 @ 08:37:22 PM AEST
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Oh that's right Penny, tar me with that same old brush! (;-)) These things some of us Men do and always have done, shouldn't make us appear less just because they're still not expected! I use comedy to avoid arguements, which are sometimes the only time we speak our true feelings, and so it goes round! :-)) Take my word! It's saying thankyou!
With love
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Re: My 'once' Love
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by MisterRight on
Wednesday, 21st August 2002 @ 03:33:04 PM AEST
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Great poem. I read the other posts and I'll have to disagree, but please correct me if I'm wrong. I don't think you were veiling the pain or hiding behind your comedy, I think the comedy was a large part of your relationship, kind of your job to put a smile on her face. either way, it's a great peom.
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Re: My 'once' Love
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by Unaekseveer1 on
Thursday, 22nd August 2002 @ 04:42:38 AM AEST
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Ah good point, I cannot correct you Curtis, you are not wrong!
But I can now see that there were times when my attempted comedy wasn't at it's most appropriate.
We were meant to be airing our individual views to one another, instead I'd do or say something that'd have us both in stitches, completely avoiding important issues, which may've kept us understanding! Or maybe not!
Thankyou for your kindness and please do keep submitting your poetry
With love
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Re: My 'once' Love
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by ShadowsCloud on
Thursday, 21st November 2002 @ 10:08:58 AM AEST
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Dean, this is a great poem. As for the hiding behide your comedy, a lot of people do that. Sometimes even I do it.
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Re: My 'once' Love
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by Unaekseveer1 on
Thursday, 21st November 2002 @ 10:22:14 AM AEST
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Yeah I know Candice, but there's sometimes it's important to be a little serious about things. I just find different ways to blame myself for what happended in the end, I just try so hard to see things from her point of view that I forget I have one too!
Thankyou Candice for you most kindly typed words.(How very English did that last bit sound!!)
With love
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Re: My 'once' Love
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by ShadowsCloud on
Thursday, 21st November 2002 @ 10:29:54 AM AEST
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Dean, you should never forget your own viewpoint. But it is good that you try to see things for her viewpoint not many people will do that.
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