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My Tears
Contributed by
Asatru
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Wednesday, 30th July 2003 @ 09:35:00 AM in AEST
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Every day,
I come home,
Throw my things on the couch,
And go to my bedroom,
I sit on my bed,
Thinking about the day,
And my life,
But only certian things come up,
I can't remember the last time something good happened to me,
That bed is stained with tears,
Which all screamed there own stories as they fell,
I've cried them all out,
Shunned them away from my view,
When I go to school,
Everyone see's this fake smile on my face,
They think it's all o.k.,
But it isn't,
I smile on the outside...yes,
But I am crying from within,
Every face I see brings a new tear,
My heart is melted with these tears,
They never go away,
These thoughts,
These memories,
There all running through my head,
It feels like a hurricane is inside of it,
I see all these happy faces all over the place,
And wonder why can't I be like that?
Why can't I truely be happy?
Why do I always sit here with my head in my hands?
Why can't I find someone to bring light to my dark world?
My friends tell me their there for me,
Right before they run away to talk to someone else,
I feel as if there not even there,
I'm always sitting where I am now,
Infront of my computer typing one of these things,
Everyone calls them poems,
I call them my tears.
Copyright ©
Asatru
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2003-07-30 09:35:00]
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Re: My Tears
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by ShadowsCloud on
Thursday, 31st July 2003 @ 04:51:55 AM AEST
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This is so sad, but beautifully written. I love it.
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Re: My Tears
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by PoloRM on
Thursday, 31st July 2003 @ 04:58:31 AM AEST
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I loved the last two lines.
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When the world has turned you down
And to all your troubles added a crown
All you can do is show a frown...
Forget the above I'm just a clown.
Your life is what you make of it
Keep holding on and never quit
For fire inside you is always lit
And someday soon you'll be out of this pit.
" If you're going through Hell, keep going" -Walt Disney
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Re: My Tears
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by LovingWhispers on
Thursday, 31st July 2003 @ 05:01:49 AM AEST
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| I have to wonder what it is that makes you so sad inside...in any case you have expressed your feelings well.I only hope you can see your talent and then when you accept it..you will find your light.You have to find a pride in yourself..something that you do that makes you happy..then just keep at it.By writing down how you feel can help you and also many others who can and will relate.You are not alone in your tears...(((huggers))) |
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Re: My Tears
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by garyh on
Thursday, 31st July 2003 @ 05:21:46 AM AEST
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personally i don't like these type of "poetry" i don't really think it is poetry.. but it seems more and more people think it is everyday.... to me its a story....
and its a good story... but i don't know how much of a poem it is...
some people say "well anything that shows emotion is poetry" but its not... if anything that showed emotion was poetry then every single book ever written would be a poem.
truely should be spelled truly also...
keep writing... and i know others have different opinions than mine... so don't pay attention to it. |
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Re: My Tears
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by Krazykaric on
Thursday, 31st July 2003 @ 05:22:38 AM AEST
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| Good write, however I hope that you get happy soon! I know life can be hard and it seems like everyone else is on top, and your still at the bottom but you have to remember everyone has there bad times, and good times as well. Maybe I can help you, read some of my poems and comment back.. to let you know your not alone! |
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Re: My Tears
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 31st July 2003 @ 06:13:58 AM AEST
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Great Write, I know how you feel, i cant remember ever being truly happy, and i know that mask all to well.
Your friends are there for you if you ask them, that i am sure off, but i will also be here whenever you feel like talking, keep your chin up
- Becca |
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Re: My Tears
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by Stonedraider23 on
Thursday, 31st July 2003 @ 06:32:20 AM AEST
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| Wow I really liked this I read it 3times....i think about my life and all when I sit at home alone and just feel sad wishing things could be different i'm just not strong enough to change it, guess i'm just to scared too..but i feel everything u say in your tears and i hope the crying stops..someone will bring the light.. |
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Re: My Tears
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by Crys on
Thursday, 31st July 2003 @ 02:00:34 PM AEST
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I'm glad you sent me a personal message asking me to read this. I don't usually go around reading other people's poetry unless i have time. Normally, I just post then check my comments, then sometimes I read the poetry of those who post on my page. But I enjoyed reading this and I have to tell you, I can relate. Big time... You should go check out some of the things I've written. You'll see that we're pretty much in the same boat. Well, atleast we have company, huh? Great write. Keep'em coming!
*~*Crys*~* |
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Re: My Tears
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by Eloise on
Thursday, 31st July 2003 @ 05:18:53 PM AEST
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| Its a lovely poem... so sad and beautiful... the last two lines were excellent... it was so well written... great write, keep it up. |
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Re: My Tears
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by Wilder on
Thursday, 31st July 2003 @ 06:28:57 PM AEST
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A forlorn poem, but equally inspiring and beautiful. I liked it. Keep up the good work! :o)
~ Wilder ~ |
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Re: My Tears
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by exiled on
Thursday, 31st July 2003 @ 08:14:39 PM AEST
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Wow, I really like this and don't think you are alone. All of those faces you see which bring another tear are thinking the same thing when they see you.
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Re: My Tears
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by stargazer on
Thursday, 7th August 2003 @ 06:01:44 PM AEST
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-sigh- Everyone always asks me how I can always wear a smile and never be sad. And the truth of the matter is... I can laugh a crude laugh and smile a fake laugh. Humans are naive. You are not alone... remember that.
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Re: My Tears
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by gery_giggles on
Tuesday, 23rd September 2003 @ 08:28:01 PM AEST
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i liked it and i'm sure everyone can relate in one way or anothor, don't lose hope and always try to talk about ur problems it helps.
"we wear masks everyday and everywhere, never showing our true face. but when u laugh a real laugh then all those masks are lifted and your trueself is revieled" my math teacher told me this, just keep it in mind.
luv alwayz! |
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