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there's a hole in my head
Contributed by
Cancer
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Monday, 4th August 2003 @ 12:05:00 AM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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there's a hole in my head and the rain falls in there's a hole in my head and the blood pours out there's a hole in my head there's a gun in my hand there's a hole in my head it's the only way out
there's a slash in my wrist i can see the bone there's a slash in my wrist tired of being alone there's a slash in my wrist i know you don't understand there's a slash in my wrist and a razor blade in my hand
there's a rope 'round my neck and it's tied to a beam there's a rope 'round my neck i must wake from this dream there's a rope 'round my neck and a tear in my eye there's a rope 'round my neck so happy to die
there's an end to this pain and it's coming up fast there's an end to this pain that i thought would always last there's an end to this pain that breeds and mutates inside there's an end to this pain and it is suicide
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Re: there's a hole in my head
(User Rating: 1 ) by arthur1210 on
Monday, 4th August 2003 @ 01:50:08 AM AEST (User
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| damn, that's interesting...and dark. I appreciate the flow but not nessecerily the theme. Thanks for sharing |
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Re: there's a hole in my head
(User Rating: 0 ) by Former_Member on
Monday, 4th August 2003 @ 05:51:43 AM AEST (User
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i dont usually like suicide poems, but this one is touching and simply GR8
i really really liked it
GINA |
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Re: there's a hole in my head
(User Rating: 1 ) by tease_whizz on
Tuesday, 5th August 2003 @ 04:11:42 PM AEST (User
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| the repetition and rhythm are an effective way of communicating the steady demise of the human soul. your recent poems are definitely some of my favorites. Kate x |
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Re: there's a hole in my head
(User Rating: 1 ) by bobotheclown on
Tuesday, 5th August 2003 @ 07:25:00 PM AEST (User
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This was interesting and very captivating. I can't say I enjoyed it however to gruesome and dark for my liking. The repetition added to the mood of the poem.
Bobo (Joel) |
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