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Dark
Contributed by
CrimsonTearz
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Thursday, 14th August 2003 @ 06:05:00 PM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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The room is empty The walls are closing in My eyes are red Tears are flowing Blood is dripping
I take in my last breath All I see is black Like the empty space inside of me Death is the only answer Nothing else will cure this pain
Life is not important Nothing here for me The pain is overbearing I can't conceal how I feel I let the tears flow
The walls close in Tears stop flowing As life ends I see nothing I hear my shallow breathing
Life is ending The pain is gone No more tears No more blood
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2003-08-14 18:05:00] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Dark
(User Rating: 1 ) by vince on
Thursday, 14th August 2003 @ 06:31:43 PM AEST (User
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nice poem for a 11 years old ... keep goin |
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Re: Dark
(User Rating: 1 ) by Saira on
Thursday, 14th August 2003 @ 09:50:46 PM AEST (User
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Welcome to YPDC Friend!
This is sad but a very good write...especially for a 11 years old. Keep up the good work!
Saira |
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Re: Dark
(User Rating: 1 ) by jaeann on
Friday, 15th August 2003 @ 05:16:16 AM AEST (User
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you wrote this when you were eleven ........profound darkness emanates from your work......welcome.....i look forward to more.....i hope there's light now where you are........ |
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Re: Dark
(User Rating: 1 ) by Kindredblood_dragon on
Saturday, 16th August 2003 @ 10:25:38 PM AEST (User
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Beautifully written, a well done poem.
Darkness radiates from it, it held me from beginnig to end, I liked this poem, keep it up. |
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Re: Dark
(User Rating: 1 ) by Nsa on
Friday, 12th September 2003 @ 10:04:50 PM AEST (User
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Better comments than any of the ones I get lol. Well, it is a pretty good poem, and excellent for a little pipsqueak 11 year old |
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