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close your eyes to the tears
Contributed by
painted_echos
on
Tuesday, 26th August 2003 @ 11:45:00 PM in AEST
Topic:
SadPoetry
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she sits on the sofa in her living room
her favorite beer in one hand, bottle of xanex in the other
he sits in a chair on the other side of the room with
his remote in hand, carelessly flicking through channels
want a beer she asks, no answer
no indication that he hears her
she opens her bottle of small white pills
pops one in her mouth and chews, numb to the bitterness
she chews another and absently wonders how many are left
her interest not enough that she would count, theres enough
cheers lover, she says, no answer
tips her beer and swallows some down
close your eyes to the tears
let the dream carry you far, far away
close your eyes to the fear
feel yourself flying far, far away
she washes down her last pill with her last sip of beer
and lies down on the sofa, good bye dear, she says
he lifts his hand and flicks the channel again, no answer
no need to hide the pill bottle she thinks, no need at all
and she smiles
knowing she wont see the morning
close your eyes to the tears
let the dream carry you far, far away
close your eyes to the fear
feel yourself flying far, far away
he turns off the set tired of flicking through channels
with nothing to watch he gets out of his chair and heads down the hall
he comes back with a blanket and gently covers her
kisses the top of her head and wonders what
dream left the smile on her lips
then he heads down the hall to his bed
close your eyes to the tears
let the dream carry you far, far away
close your eyes to the fear
feel yourself flying far, far away
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2003-08-26 23:45:00]
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Re: close your eyes to the tears
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by EmSal on
Wednesday, 27th August 2003 @ 09:54:27 AM AEST
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That poem was so emotional. I loved it so much even though it isn't a great subject. It's the things people don't say sometimes that can hurt us...I feel this.
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Re: close your eyes to the tears
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by DreamWeaver on
Thursday, 28th August 2003 @ 07:02:49 AM AEST
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| Wow ... you took a moment out of my life ... this was so real to me ... well written ... Jan |
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Re: close your eyes to the tears
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by painted_echos on
Thursday, 28th August 2003 @ 11:47:27 PM AEST
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thank you very much...it is true, much goes unsaid. this was written a few weeks before my ex moved out (jan or feb). the poem,'the wind was blowing' (just submitted) was written the day he moved.
again, thank you
m |
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Re: close your eyes to the tears
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by painted_echos on
Thursday, 28th August 2003 @ 11:54:19 PM AEST
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thank you. it is a feeling of hopelessness, or inevitableness (is that a word!). ...but there is always hope.
m |
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Re: close your eyes to the tears
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by jaeann on
Friday, 29th August 2003 @ 04:01:01 AM AEST
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| this was an amazing story....you told it so well....with that little last bit of shock at the end......knowing what he's not going to wake up to the next day....makes you want to see his realization....... |
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Re: close your eyes to the tears
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by Crow on
Friday, 29th August 2003 @ 02:49:22 PM AEST
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what a great story/poem so sad. you have taken my heart away with this. i`m going now,checking on everyone close to me.
super write, and a my pleasure to read. Crow |
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