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broken are my rosez
Contributed by
kinghtcalvinshoemaker
on
Wednesday, 27th August 2003 @ 04:05:00 PM in AEST
Topic:
Haiku
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token, none there lies of them, broken
broken with scatterd pettles, them
stem there of the tortures, token
them, the counterpart to pettles, stem
why, if they could the pettles would, cry
cry would there tears be shed too, red
dead these broken roses where, why
red, there blood tears ebb they are dead
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Re: broken are my rosez
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by Daniela_Maria_Violin on
Thursday, 28th August 2003 @ 04:03:12 AM AEST
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what you have written isn't a haiku
it's an octave... (8 line poem)
haikus are three line poems with 5 syllables in the first line, 7 in the second and 5 in the third usually talks about something in nature
Example:
A tiny white cloud
On the wind that passes by
Fills me with pleasure
hope that helps. |
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