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Pronouncement Of Anguish
Contributed by
jaeann
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Tuesday, 9th September 2003 @ 05:05:00 PM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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The loss in sight, a loss to connect. Never putting face to sound, a page in life disconnects.
That damn doorbell the ****ing ring, was just the beginning they both, for years would sing.
A man of cloth, many a person of faith always pushing or punishing playcating beatitudes on display.
A look of pity fate be scorned one last chance always losing a little girl once more forlorn.
A promise to keep so many vows severed selfish alterations bonds lost forever.
A downfall of grief the silence crept in one by one they fall nothing left to believe in.
Anger so rare ire becoming free how dare them their absence all choices stolen from me.
No picture replaces no practice restores the evidence of loss the meaning of score.
Tally the cost raise the bar struggling gets so deep don't rush up too far.
Sshh .... listen to the pounding 'tis only your beating heart the rise up of fear giving you that start.
Who's waiting at the door to ring the ***damn bell, ignore the ****ing ring don't let fate inside to cast her spell.
Costly uninviting darkness encroaches into day, leave your message on the outside wall inside is where to stay.
Copyright ©
jaeann
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2003-09-09 17:05:00] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Pronouncement Of Anguish
(User Rating: 1 ) by bobotheclown on
Tuesday, 9th September 2003 @ 06:18:59 PM AEST (User
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i loved this very poetic
A downfall of grief
the silence crept in
i loved those lines as well as the mood throughout the poem.
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Re: Pronouncement Of Anguish
(User Rating: 1 ) by lovingcritters on
Tuesday, 9th September 2003 @ 07:08:35 PM AEST (User
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Dear Jaymee, how great! Powerful, and yet reasonable too!
Staying within where it is safe.
No more placating, no more announcing your fate!
Have they been there....far from....yet they ring your door bell.....all is gone!
Stay inside dear Jaymee....stay where it's warm and you don't feel.....where only your heart will beat, and you'll understand......
Can't adjust to all, and sometimes none.
Do what will help you the most.
"Make No Heartache Today!" your toast!
Warm hugs Jaymee....I love you!
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Re: Pronouncement Of Anguish
(User Rating: 1 ) by POOBEAR on
Tuesday, 9th September 2003 @ 07:32:25 PM AEST (User
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Dearest Jaeann,
This is so powerful and touching.
Staying within yourself does seem
to be the safest place . I know because
that is my usual hangout. Your writing
always seems to touch a part of me
that I could never describe. Thank you
so much for sharing your pain and
letting others know they are not
alone in feeling the pain.
much love to you,
POOBEAR
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Re: Pronouncement Of Anguish
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 9th September 2003 @ 08:30:32 PM AEST (User
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| Truly a masterpiece. Powerful and emotional. You are a real talent. Every word bleeds anger and pain. Great work.! |
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Re: Pronouncement Of Anguish
(User Rating: 1 ) by Cancer on
Saturday, 13th September 2003 @ 02:48:25 PM AEST (User
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very dark. an ominous mood throughout. i enjoyed this. this moved me in ways that i'm not even sure i understand. amazing piece.
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