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Bare Feet
Contributed by
revdoc1
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Wednesday, 10th September 2003 @ 12:35:00 PM in AEST
Topic:
InspirationalPoems
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Finally, I dance among the rules.
As in a faerie ring
Making circles in bare feet.
A raised eyebrow here,
A whisper there
But , I am free.
Free to skip.
Free to canter.
Free to make a mark
in the dust of retrospection
With my own bare feet.
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Re: Bare Feet
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by Ilhar on
Wednesday, 10th September 2003 @ 12:56:42 PM AEST
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lovely
Shari
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Re: Bare Feet
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by Jellybellyprincess on
Wednesday, 10th September 2003 @ 03:18:13 PM AEST
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revdoc1,
I completely agree with the thought on going barefoot and putting it all out there in life. Amazing writing in a small space- short and sweet. i loved it!
;)
Jellybellyprincess
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Re: Bare Feet
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by PhantomsLDY on
Wednesday, 10th September 2003 @ 04:30:10 PM AEST
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| I am also in agreement as I hate to wear shoes and don't unless I have to. Wonderful write!! |
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Re: Bare Feet
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by Crow on
Wednesday, 10th September 2003 @ 06:46:32 PM AEST
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| I do understand, what a pretty write. Crow |
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Re: Bare Feet
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by TheSpiritx on
Monday, 22nd September 2003 @ 10:04:30 PM AEST
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I admire your mastery of associating from superficial concepts to underlying depth.
Your celebration of life with others important to you is well conveyed.
"Free to make a mark/in the dust of retrospection" is quite a fascinating pair of lines in that it comments on your freedom to (and possibly from) looking back on life... perhaps to learn lessons from the past, or maybe to jsut enjoy it. The final line is a tip of the hat towards personal power and rounds out the poem in a positive, uplifting light.
Exceptional composition. |
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