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AbOuT To BrEaK
Contributed by
Chanti
on
Thursday, 11th September 2003 @ 07:35:00 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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I yell i scream,
i cant take you anymore,
youve broken me down,
to my hearts core,
i cant stand when you talk,
like i know nothing at all,
i cant stand how you act,
you make me feel so small,
and then the second you leave,
i cant help but scream,
you drive me insane,
throwing fists at everything,
suddenly i cant see,
i can only see red,
i can only feel hate,
and try to forget what you said,
then i break down in tears,
and do what i can,
bring pain on myself,
to forget who i am,
but i cant forget,
its just like a nightmare,
no matter where i turn,
you seem to be there,
standing over my shouler,
watching every step i take,
waiting for me to fail,
to make a mistake,
and i cant stand it anymore,
i want to end it all,
i want to let you see me stumble,
to let you see me fall,
fall into a deep sleep,
in which i will never wake,
youve been pushing me too far,
and now im about to break.
Copyright ©
Chanti
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2003-09-11 19:35:00]
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Re: AbOuT To BrEaK
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by SpreadYourWings on
Thursday, 11th September 2003 @ 09:59:24 PM AEST
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Wow, powerful and beautiful my poem. I'm going through a time in my life where theres a person whom I love very much, but consistently brings me down and makes me cry. All I have to do it seems like to get depressed is look at him and I fall apart.
I especially loved these lines:
"i want to let you see me stumble,
to let you see me fall,
fall into a deep sleep,"
I connect with this poem so well and I thank you for writing it.
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Re: AbOuT To BrEaK
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by DreamWeaver on
Thursday, 11th September 2003 @ 10:31:25 PM AEST
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| Excellent write ... your words flowed well and expressed your anguish perfectly ... Jan |
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Re: AbOuT To BrEaK
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by EmSal on
Friday, 12th September 2003 @ 01:44:58 AM AEST
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They bring you pain, they make you bring pain on yourself, I understand. Just want to make them feel so guilty if you die, they have to live with that. This poem can be expressed by people who are there, you brought it out excellently. Thanks for sharing.
Emma. |
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Re: AbOuT To BrEaK
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 12th September 2003 @ 02:16:18 AM AEST
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| Heartwrenching pain and anguish in your words. You are an awesome poet. Thank you for the lines in the forum. Awesome poem. Peace and serenity always be in your heart and soul. |
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Re: AbOuT To BrEaK
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by bobotheclown on
Friday, 12th September 2003 @ 03:06:48 PM AEST
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this was great you make everything seem so real and vivid. I hope you can forget this person who is doing this to you.
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