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Emptiness
Contributed by
Aika
on
Tuesday, 23rd September 2003 @ 02:05:00 AM in AEST
Topic:
SadPoetry
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I am extremely upset
nervous and mad
too touchy and sad
and feeling so bad
I am dived in the emptiness
nothing around makes sense
my world collapsed
and I see no end..
I used to be a lovely rose
now I am only a thorn
The excinct volcano
the arid ground
frozen heart
water dry
hot snow
and the wind does not blow..
I am willing to lie down
to never stand up
I am willing to give up
and never go on my life....
I know what I miss and need
it is the freedom of the sea.....
At the end of every path
must be a little light
my light will surely be found
I only do not know when and how......
Copyright ©
Aika
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2003-09-23 02:05:00]
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Re: Emptiness
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by Jenni_Kalicharan on
Tuesday, 23rd September 2003 @ 07:15:55 AM AEST
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Good imagery!! Nicely done..
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Re: Emptiness
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by nigelangel1 on
Tuesday, 23rd September 2003 @ 02:54:13 PM AEST
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| Your feeling makes me cry too...Seek yee light and light shall find thee...look north west....find the dolphin....he waits......Keep writing.....from Nig |
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Re: Emptiness
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by lovingcritters on
Wednesday, 24th September 2003 @ 05:54:25 AM AEST
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Aika....this is one of your best writes....
I really loved it.....you painted pictures in my mind...and I could see it, and even feel it!
It was great!
Keep up the good work
lovingcritters
Connie Sue |
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Re: Emptiness
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by Puppy_dog_eyes on
Friday, 24th October 2003 @ 12:53:07 PM AEST
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| Lovely aika..the frozen heart you talk about......there is so much warmth there,how else could you write with so much feeling ? |
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