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cant-skate
Contributed by
cant-skate
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Monday, 6th October 2003 @ 01:12:00 PM in AEST
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oops
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too heavy
too smooth
too steady i cant move!
I'm not dumb
iI'm not fool
stuck to the earth
too steady I cant move
I scream i groove
but the wall is in front me
and it doesnt move
I ull I push
I try to break loose
someone rescue me
I think it's my foot
maybe too deep
so hard to keep
to skate it down is all I need!
heaven is a fall
to eternal sleep!
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cant-skate
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2003-10-06 13:12:00]
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Re: cant-skate
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by MoonlitAngel on
Monday, 6th October 2003 @ 01:26:53 PM AEST
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Clearly a very personal write. And pretty deep, considering it was written out of anger. I like the line "I think it's my foot". Hehe. Overall, good job as always.
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Re: cant-skate
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by norticus on
Monday, 6th October 2003 @ 04:18:14 PM AEST
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| I wish this never had left it's metaphoric birth. It almost was my favorite of the day. It did and it wasn't. Oh well. Still good. 4.5 on the Nortiscale. |
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