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Death Dealer
Contributed by
undeadsuperstar
on
Wednesday, 15th October 2003 @ 01:29:24 AM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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Ive had enough
Ill change the world
Ive got my gun
my hates unfurled
Murders angels
Cold blue steel
One trigger pull
To spin the wheel
Im the dealer
its my table
Like Im your Cain
And youre my Abel
so Raise the stakes
And drop the ball
The time has come
To take the fall
the killer comes
with hell to raise
fates roulette spins
our numbered days
from underfoot
to standing tall
the one you crushed
is now your god
Copyright ©
undeadsuperstar
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2003-10-15 01:29:24]
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Re: Death Dealer
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 15th October 2003 @ 02:06:39 AM AEST
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| Awesome poem..... very dark....love it! |
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Re: Death Dealer
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by garyh on
Wednesday, 15th October 2003 @ 02:07:07 AM AEST
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| cool write with nice rhythm... keep up the work i like the story ;) |
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Re: Death Dealer
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by LovingWhispers on
Wednesday, 15th October 2003 @ 03:01:18 AM AEST
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oooh..I like this :)
"I’m the dealer
it’s my table
Like I’m your Cain
And you’re my Abel"
Excellent!!!
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Re: Death Dealer
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by jaeann on
Wednesday, 15th October 2003 @ 11:23:18 AM AEST
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| so very dark.....i love this!!!!!!!! |
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Re: Death Dealer
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by bobotheclown on
Wednesday, 15th October 2003 @ 03:33:56 PM AEST
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I liked the rhythm and the beat to this poem. Very nice not to dark but thats ok.
Bobo (Joel) |
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Re: Death Dealer
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by eternityandaday4u on
Friday, 9th July 2004 @ 01:22:51 PM AEST
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| wow very nice!!! i love it it was awesome. you have major talent. keep up the good work keep em coming! |
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