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Render Me Vacant
Contributed by
MoonlitAngel
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Friday, 17th October 2003 @ 12:39:27 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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I see myself in you and turn away from what I've become
I feel so numb
Everything you've been saying has just been passing right through me
I'm so empty
(I can't feel you there)
It isn't over now so I guess I'm just paranoid
I'm one huge void
I'm scared I won't bleed if I pick up the knife and start cutting
I feel nothing
(Bring me back to life)
Even though I'm so relieved you wanted me back in your bed
I just feel dead
There must be something wrong with me 'cause I turned away again
Like I'm frozen
(Why can't I feel you there?)
I'd rather be in love with you but it seems I simply can't
My heart's vacant
Looking past my suspicions all along, how was I to know
It'd leave me so hollow?
(Something in me died that night)
When you can't feel your face
And there's nothing inside
When you just won't wake up
And you can't move at all
Do you disappear just a little?
Do you fade into the sky?
Do you become a little less real?
Is there still reason to try?
Still tears to cry?
I can't feel
But I feel empty
It's like you stole my soul
And rendered my heart vacant
What can I do
To bring it back again
To feel you there again
Please make me feel something real
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MoonlitAngel
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2003-10-17 12:39:27]
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Re: Render Me Vacant
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by Daniela_Maria_Violin on
Friday, 17th October 2003 @ 12:46:16 PM AEST
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Wow Moonlit... this is awesome
Reads like a song I would want to hear :) |
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Re: Render Me Vacant
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by Kalika on
Friday, 17th October 2003 @ 01:01:10 PM AEST
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I'm told that there is always a reason to try. Ive found that sometimes that reason is very small or hard to find. I think u need to find that reasin and then ask if its stil worth it.........
Blessed be
Kali |
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Re: Render Me Vacant
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by jaeann on
Friday, 17th October 2003 @ 01:06:36 PM AEST
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| brilliant write!!!!!!! |
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Re: Render Me Vacant
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by Merry on
Friday, 17th October 2003 @ 01:09:32 PM AEST
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a breakthrough, no doubt, in your self understanding as well as your writing - nice work.
merry |
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Re: Render Me Vacant
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by tease_whizz on
Friday, 17th October 2003 @ 02:20:01 PM AEST
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| an interesting write, you express your emotios clearly and the form is good. a bit too Linkin Park style for my liking but good nonetheless. Kate x |
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Re: Render Me Vacant
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by resurrection on
Friday, 17th October 2003 @ 02:28:49 PM AEST
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Nice wording and flow... I can really relate...
Good one, -res- |
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