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you alone
Contributed by
rain
on
Tuesday, 28th October 2003 @ 11:54:17 PM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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i watched you walk across the room
from the shadows i call home
i listened to you chat with others
from the dark corners unseen
i kept my distance
admired from afar
i did not dare approch
to my amazement you approched me
you stepped among the darkness
you enter my world of shadow
befriended me when noone else would
i grew to know you
and without thinking
to love you
six months today have passed
since the day you first asked me out
you took a chance no one else dared to
and for that my heart belongs to you alone
you've showed me things i never dreamed id see
you'ved helped me learn to cry
you've smashed all reason
for my faithful razorblade
and brought me from the shadows
and in return i love you alone
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rain
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2003-10-28 23:54:17]
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Re: you alone
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by Undeadsuperstar on
Wednesday, 29th October 2003 @ 12:24:00 AM AEST
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this is easily one of the best i've read here, not so much for the structure, but for the content, ideas, and emotions. I like the progression from distant observation to the formation of a real attachment, a relationship. My favorite line is
"you've smashed all reason
for my faithful razorblade"
that line has such a reality to it, this reminds my in a very vivid sense of where i came from in my own relationship with my g/f. She never even knew how she saved me from my own self demise, and for that i love her most
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Re: you alone
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by DreamWeaver on
Wednesday, 29th October 2003 @ 03:11:43 AM AEST
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| Beautiful thoughts and emotions ... I felt this as I read it ... great write ... Jan |
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