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You Don't See A Thing
Contributed by
blueheart
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Friday, 31st October 2003 @ 08:12:22 AM in AEST
Topic:
sarcasticpoetry
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Do you see the streams of sorrow,
Meandering through my soul,
Those dreary cries and prickling lies,
That my eyes have not told.
Do you see the pain reflected,
In my moist and sullen eyes,
When you smile and yet betray me,
Do you hear my soundless cries.
Do you see the torment that I bear,
When you trot along with him,
So ignorant to the death you've caused,
You don't even see a thing.
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blueheart
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2003-10-31 08:12:22]
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Re: You Don't See A Thing
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 31st October 2003 @ 08:56:35 AM AEST
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| You did good on this cause I felt all the pain it radiated. I liked it and understood it. |
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Re: You Don't See A Thing
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by Ronald on
Friday, 31st October 2003 @ 09:28:55 AM AEST
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| You've projected your feelings very well here. Good job blueheart |
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Re: You Don't See A Thing
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 31st October 2003 @ 03:20:10 PM AEST
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| Wow...I really liked the way you did this. A great use of words. The pain stepped from the page and into my soul. Very well done my friend.....Rakerman(Larry) |
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Re: You Don't See A Thing
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by LovingWhispers on
Friday, 31st October 2003 @ 05:09:04 PM AEST
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| OUCH!! I can tell by the words and the feelings I get from reading this that you didnt write this...your pain did.Excellent! |
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Re: You Don't See A Thing
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by DreamWeaver on
Friday, 31st October 2003 @ 05:40:08 PM AEST
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| Great write .... your pain is evident in every word ... Jan |
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